for The Past, The Present11/12/2007 c9 sdffds
I was hoping that Varlek wouldn't die. :( He was my favorite. There were still a few grammar problems, but I like where the story is going. It's interesting and I'll definitely keep reading. That was a really fast update by the way.
I was hoping that Varlek wouldn't die. :( He was my favorite. There were still a few grammar problems, but I like where the story is going. It's interesting and I'll definitely keep reading. That was a really fast update by the way.
11/11/2007 c8 sdffds
I really couldn't stop reading, the battle descriptions were great. There were some grammar stuff, I'll try to point some out:
while others were drove into a tough battle. (drove should be driven)
Glidas couldn't help(,) but allowed a single line of tear dropped off to his cheek (dropped should be drop)
Yah...well, other than a few grammar stuff, great job! Update soon, looking forward to reading more.
I really couldn't stop reading, the battle descriptions were great. There were some grammar stuff, I'll try to point some out:
while others were drove into a tough battle. (drove should be driven)
Glidas couldn't help(,) but allowed a single line of tear dropped off to his cheek (dropped should be drop)
Yah...well, other than a few grammar stuff, great job! Update soon, looking forward to reading more.
11/2/2007 c7 sdffds
I would have reviewed earlier,but yah, schoollwork, uggh, hate homework! Anyway, I thought this chapter was really good. It was a lot cleaner than your other chapters, great job! Keep updating!
I would have reviewed earlier,but yah, schoollwork, uggh, hate homework! Anyway, I thought this chapter was really good. It was a lot cleaner than your other chapters, great job! Keep updating!
10/25/2007 c3 sdffds
haha, that was a funny chapter. I love how Ranoth is so afraid of getting killed because he's flirting with a princess. I agree with Ranoth, Glidas and Shyves would make a lovely couple. Good job, there were some grammar and spelling errors, but yah...Ex: 'As the proceed through the..." Maybe it should be, "As the proceeded through the.." cause' you're using past tense, I think. Yah...I don't know, I'm not a huge grammar and spelling person. I make mistakes all the time so I guess they're just normal, if you consider me normal that is. :P I'll keep reading. I enjoyed reading the chapter.
haha, that was a funny chapter. I love how Ranoth is so afraid of getting killed because he's flirting with a princess. I agree with Ranoth, Glidas and Shyves would make a lovely couple. Good job, there were some grammar and spelling errors, but yah...Ex: 'As the proceed through the..." Maybe it should be, "As the proceeded through the.." cause' you're using past tense, I think. Yah...I don't know, I'm not a huge grammar and spelling person. I make mistakes all the time so I guess they're just normal, if you consider me normal that is. :P I'll keep reading. I enjoyed reading the chapter.
10/24/2007 c1 sdffds
You have a good way of capturing someone's attention, but I kind of got a little confused about what was happening, like why did Glidas draw a sword against Varlek? Maybe you should explain some things a bit more. I don't know, I'm not a very good critic, just thought this story deserves a review since it is pretty interesting. I'll be looking forward to reading more, lol, I've only read the prologue so far, which might be why I'm so confused. I'll keep reading.
You have a good way of capturing someone's attention, but I kind of got a little confused about what was happening, like why did Glidas draw a sword against Varlek? Maybe you should explain some things a bit more. I don't know, I'm not a very good critic, just thought this story deserves a review since it is pretty interesting. I'll be looking forward to reading more, lol, I've only read the prologue so far, which might be why I'm so confused. I'll keep reading.