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7/4/2009 c1 Isca
It's rather frightening to think that we'll be able to watch our loved one's grieve. I'm not sure I could handle watching my corpse and such. I like the contrast between the lines 'I'm alive' and 'I'm still here.' The first suggests that the speaker isn't comfortable with the fact that they're dead yet and keeps telling themself that they're just as 'alive' as the next human, but the latter line suggests that the speaker eventually learns to 'remain' present in the lives of their loved one's in a more spiritual way. I think the line 'I won't break' was my favourite-it's so heart-breaking and honest. Keep up the great work. :)
9/27/2007 c1 32fillipeano
It was decent, it just seems unfinished or unpolished. I like how you use life as an example of how you feel in this poem.

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