for Cycle5/1/2008 c1 
10ticktockman
exiteing!
it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this.
10ticktockmanexiteing!
it is lovely seeing the world from a different angle that we are used to. I love this.
2/4/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
The idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea..
612simpleplan13The idea of using bees is really interesting... its not an animal or creature most ppl like, yet you definitely made me relate to them... very good piece.. a new take on the whole idea..
10/12/2007 c1 62Oracle of Destiny
I loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done!
62Oracle of DestinyI loved this poem! I felt sorry for the bees when it was winter and everything was dying. I cheered (with the them!) as summer brought new life for the bees. It really does show the cycle of life especially in nature and different seasons. Well done!
10/5/2007 c1 6xEmoMuffinx
Another review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver*
Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern.
6xEmoMuffinxAnother review I felt compelled to make. I like your poem! It's got a good moral theme! I reckon yours has a more realistic one than mine..."determination...persistence..."...*shiver*
Anyway, nice rhymes! I find it a bit hard to find the appropriate word if I have to stick to a rhyming pattern.
10/3/2007 c1 16RuathaWehrling
Hello! Cute poem. :)
The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it.
Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest!
- Ruatha
16RuathaWehrlingHello! Cute poem. :)
The one bit of criticism that I have is that the last stanza doesn't rhyme like the others do. "Rainfall" doesn't match "once more". It sort of through me off when I was reading it. You might want to look at it.
Nice work, otherwise! Hope you did well in the contest!
- Ruatha