for june is our muse10/3/2007 c1 
829Anaare
First of all, thank you indeed for the review of "Je Crois Encore" on my first profile (setne). Nowadays, I hardly get any reviews there, so it is much appreciated!
This poem is once again a beautiful product. Combining the creation of poetry with seasons and colours is a wonderful entanglement that uses some great imagery. The title is also very effective and sums up the whole piece nicely. One question though: shouldn't, in the final line, "phases" be "phrases"? On the other hand, this also sounds good. Another reference to the seasons.
Good work and keep writing!
829AnaareFirst of all, thank you indeed for the review of "Je Crois Encore" on my first profile (setne). Nowadays, I hardly get any reviews there, so it is much appreciated!
This poem is once again a beautiful product. Combining the creation of poetry with seasons and colours is a wonderful entanglement that uses some great imagery. The title is also very effective and sums up the whole piece nicely. One question though: shouldn't, in the final line, "phases" be "phrases"? On the other hand, this also sounds good. Another reference to the seasons.
Good work and keep writing!
9/30/2007 c1 15Carnival Casualties
This is absolutely beautiful. I'll be honest and say this is the way I wish I could write, but it never seems to come out. It's beautiful, and true.
"worn-out poetry notebooks, crisping the words entirely until they curl and die, ready for burial in a paragraph of posies"
That was my favorite bit.
15Carnival CasualtiesThis is absolutely beautiful. I'll be honest and say this is the way I wish I could write, but it never seems to come out. It's beautiful, and true.
"worn-out poetry notebooks, crisping the words entirely until they curl and die, ready for burial in a paragraph of posies"
That was my favorite bit.