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8/7/2008 c1 70PoetryQueen
This is well-written, but I do not completely agree with you. It is not the boy's fault that he was shot. Even if he wouldn't have been making fun of the killer, the killer still would have brought the gun to school. Just my oponion.
10/8/2007 c1 11xDancingintheRainx
Intense piece. I think if you show a bit more emotion, it will make it more real and make the words come to life. I'm not too fond of the flow here. Its so broken up and it jumps around. You did a nice job with this piece though. Keep it up!
10/7/2007 c1 27Blondie Pants
this is really good. i like how you left the question at the end hanging, and i liked that you mentioned that perhaps just being nice to him could have stopped it. great job!
10/4/2007 c1 sylvia's syndrome
This is a volatile subject and I think you took a very interesting point of view. The very direct nature of the questions you posed in this was almost unsettling, and I think that effect was perfect for this piece. Keep up the good work!

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