for A Flowerbed of Weeds3/7/2008 c1 person is gone
Strange ^^ But I like it. I was wondering at first why the weed-killing came before the bee, but it made sense in the end... anyway, you say you're not very good with words but I like the simplicity with which you wrote it. I made it easy to read, relatable and believable.
And yeah, I agree with the ending not being strong enough... but I really can't think of an alternative O.o
Loved it anyway =)
Moon's Poetess
Strange ^^ But I like it. I was wondering at first why the weed-killing came before the bee, but it made sense in the end... anyway, you say you're not very good with words but I like the simplicity with which you wrote it. I made it easy to read, relatable and believable.
And yeah, I agree with the ending not being strong enough... but I really can't think of an alternative O.o
Loved it anyway =)
Moon's Poetess
10/16/2007 c1 
5The Storyteller's Daughter
This story is told from an interesting point of view and made me think in a different way. I really like the message you're trying to send out and I agree that human beings are slowly destroying nature and that it might not exist one day if we don't work to protect it.
5The Storyteller's DaughterThis story is told from an interesting point of view and made me think in a different way. I really like the message you're trying to send out and I agree that human beings are slowly destroying nature and that it might not exist one day if we don't work to protect it.
10/9/2007 c1 5nuttx
'tanula, I love how you always take the perspective of something else. Like, not a person. =)
I'm guessing you know who I am...?
Oh, and as for a beta-reader-ish thing... I'd be happy to work with 'muff and occasionally beta-read. Provided, of course, that I'm actually on the net.
5nuttx'tanula, I love how you always take the perspective of something else. Like, not a person. =)
I'm guessing you know who I am...?
Oh, and as for a beta-reader-ish thing... I'd be happy to work with 'muff and occasionally beta-read. Provided, of course, that I'm actually on the net.
10/8/2007 c1 6xEmoMuffinx
Oh no! You took one of my edits the wrong way!
"Just like a dog was a man’s best friend, bees were best friends of flowers."
Although the sentence is now in the same tense, it's kind of different to the rest of the paragraph.
The ending is good.
6xEmoMuffinxOh no! You took one of my edits the wrong way!
"Just like a dog was a man’s best friend, bees were best friends of flowers."
Although the sentence is now in the same tense, it's kind of different to the rest of the paragraph.
The ending is good.