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Great job! You were able to give a lot of information in the dialogue without making it seem rehearsed, and that is very impressive. Please update soon.
18GRAYTEXTGreat job! You were able to give a lot of information in the dialogue without making it seem rehearsed, and that is very impressive. Please update soon.
10/14/2007 c1 14C. Catlin
Very good first chapter! Well written and thought out. I honestly hope to read more of this in the future! Keep going!
C. Catlin
14C. CatlinVery good first chapter! Well written and thought out. I honestly hope to read more of this in the future! Keep going!
C. Catlin
10/13/2007 c1 3Trivia Malcolm
It looks pretty good! So far, your idea seem decent. I look forward to your next installment!
~E.H.~
3Trivia MalcolmIt looks pretty good! So far, your idea seem decent. I look forward to your next installment!
~E.H.~
10/13/2007 c1 4Kelsci J. Sceasel
Holy cow. This is awesome! Your story, that is, not what's happening to her (I still don't know her name). This is going on my alert. Keep writing!
4Kelsci J. SceaselHoly cow. This is awesome! Your story, that is, not what's happening to her (I still don't know her name). This is going on my alert. Keep writing!