for Lips Burn Caustic12/10/2010 c5 
1Triizore
Dude, I'm re-reading this and I really must have been speed reading when I read this chapte because there is so much I missed.
I love this, though. You should really try to get this published. I think you could make it.
1TriizoreDude, I'm re-reading this and I really must have been speed reading when I read this chapte because there is so much I missed.
I love this, though. You should really try to get this published. I think you could make it.
11/29/2010 c31 3Isa B
OMG Ok, I don't know if I've ever reviewed for this story, but I have to let you know I love it.
And I have to tell you that Soco Amoretto Lime is one of my favorite songs and when you said Brand New I was like, "OH SHIT NO! YEEAH BITCHES!" which is somewhat reminiscent of Rosco... anywho...
And this is a few chapters late but I'm lazy so eh:
ok, this whole thing with Demen is...weird. It's just... random.
I don't know, it came on suddenly. And how do they know he died? When the conversation on the speakerphoney thing happened, it seemed like there was serious doubt as to him actually dying... if his neck was broken, how would he be up and puking if he's basically paralyzed... I dunno, but yeah
and wtf is up with Mason? I want his PMSing explained other than 'changing'. Basically now that you've started working on this again... keep... doing.. it? Ya know what I'm sayin'? I want this story to not end but I need the ending and now I'm just talking or really typing but okay I'm gonna stop now hope you enjoyed reading this?
um... bye!
3Isa BOMG Ok, I don't know if I've ever reviewed for this story, but I have to let you know I love it.
And I have to tell you that Soco Amoretto Lime is one of my favorite songs and when you said Brand New I was like, "OH SHIT NO! YEEAH BITCHES!" which is somewhat reminiscent of Rosco... anywho...
And this is a few chapters late but I'm lazy so eh:
ok, this whole thing with Demen is...weird. It's just... random.
I don't know, it came on suddenly. And how do they know he died? When the conversation on the speakerphoney thing happened, it seemed like there was serious doubt as to him actually dying... if his neck was broken, how would he be up and puking if he's basically paralyzed... I dunno, but yeah
and wtf is up with Mason? I want his PMSing explained other than 'changing'. Basically now that you've started working on this again... keep... doing.. it? Ya know what I'm sayin'? I want this story to not end but I need the ending and now I'm just talking or really typing but okay I'm gonna stop now hope you enjoyed reading this?
um... bye!
11/24/2010 c30 3Balliett
okay, so, i'm kind of all teary-eyed. suicide is terrifying and horrible and it makes me ache everywhere. it's one of those heartbreaking things, you know? i consider demen's words and actions and whatnot in the last chapter and then his death and sdfkhlsdfgkh. i want to know all the whys and how comes. i'm sorry that you've had a similar experience. i just - i wouldn't want anyone to have to deal with something like that you know? the heart-wrenching and the pain and just dsklhglkh. -huggle-
i felt so bad for rosco at the opening of this chapter. awkward as hell, man. and this "'I'm going to find a prostitute. Then I'm going to punch her.'" made me lol. reminds me of my best friend; it's something he would say.
that phone scene actually felt plausible to me as well. people react differently when they lose loved ones. and mothers, well, they have that bond with their kids. i mean, they bring their kids into the world. i can't even begin to imagine how they must feel when their child dies. i just. kfghsfgkh. ;_;
as for rosco's and vito's narration-of-sorts of demen's death, hm. it gave me conflicting emotions, i guess. on one hand, the descriptions and writing was fantastic. but on the other hand, it kind of made me a little ill, i suppose. just because it's such a scary thought and it's insensitivity. but i think it's an interesting way of portraying it. it's just likely to be taken as something offensive, though i don't really think it is.
avery, nellie, and dorian seem quite chill. "'Alliteration,' Avery whispers.
'Dude, I know,' Vito hisses. They long-distance high-five." LOL. i need a friend like this, one who will nerd over such awesome things like literary devices.
ew drugs. ahh, well; it's a very teenager thing to do, i guess. that whole scene at the end was really kind of hilarious. oh, vito, never failing to awe me even when high. "Vito smiles feathery soft. 'Not a good time. Here, son, I'll make you safe,' he says all breathy-like and covers my eyes with his hand so that I see nothing." - i love this. and i love that he keeps calling rosco euterpe. (:
even if you're not entirely pleased with the way this turned out, i really like it. it just really works for this story, for the characters, imho. awesome chapter. i'm excitedly anticipating part i. :D
also, happy thanksgiving~ hope you have a good one. ^^
3Balliettokay, so, i'm kind of all teary-eyed. suicide is terrifying and horrible and it makes me ache everywhere. it's one of those heartbreaking things, you know? i consider demen's words and actions and whatnot in the last chapter and then his death and sdfkhlsdfgkh. i want to know all the whys and how comes. i'm sorry that you've had a similar experience. i just - i wouldn't want anyone to have to deal with something like that you know? the heart-wrenching and the pain and just dsklhglkh. -huggle-
i felt so bad for rosco at the opening of this chapter. awkward as hell, man. and this "'I'm going to find a prostitute. Then I'm going to punch her.'" made me lol. reminds me of my best friend; it's something he would say.
that phone scene actually felt plausible to me as well. people react differently when they lose loved ones. and mothers, well, they have that bond with their kids. i mean, they bring their kids into the world. i can't even begin to imagine how they must feel when their child dies. i just. kfghsfgkh. ;_;
as for rosco's and vito's narration-of-sorts of demen's death, hm. it gave me conflicting emotions, i guess. on one hand, the descriptions and writing was fantastic. but on the other hand, it kind of made me a little ill, i suppose. just because it's such a scary thought and it's insensitivity. but i think it's an interesting way of portraying it. it's just likely to be taken as something offensive, though i don't really think it is.
avery, nellie, and dorian seem quite chill. "'Alliteration,' Avery whispers.
'Dude, I know,' Vito hisses. They long-distance high-five." LOL. i need a friend like this, one who will nerd over such awesome things like literary devices.
ew drugs. ahh, well; it's a very teenager thing to do, i guess. that whole scene at the end was really kind of hilarious. oh, vito, never failing to awe me even when high. "Vito smiles feathery soft. 'Not a good time. Here, son, I'll make you safe,' he says all breathy-like and covers my eyes with his hand so that I see nothing." - i love this. and i love that he keeps calling rosco euterpe. (:
even if you're not entirely pleased with the way this turned out, i really like it. it just really works for this story, for the characters, imho. awesome chapter. i'm excitedly anticipating part i. :D
also, happy thanksgiving~ hope you have a good one. ^^
11/24/2010 c29 Balliett
skadfbslkghslfkgh. HOLLY YOU UPDATED, YOU UPDATED~! i totally spazzed when i saw. fo' realz. made me excited~ 8D
and, holy shit, this chapter is so amazing. it opens with these two fantastic paragraphs of awesomeness and lovely imagery. and the variety in your syntax is just really great, as usual. there are so many things at work underneath the surface of your words and i love that. C:
i felt a certain kind of sadness to this chapter - just, like, a tinge mixed in with all of rosco's intriguing musings. i get a sense of maturity and growth from this chapter as well. not only from the characters - who have developed over time in such a great way - but also from you as a writer, i think. your writing is really wonderful to read. so is this whole story in general.
to be honest, i prefer mason the way he is now. i think he's still himself, just with some of the layers stripped off.
as for demen, he still interests me. he might be creepy, but he's definitely piques my curiosity. i feel like something is going to happen to him, but i don't know what exactly. i guess i'll find out when i read the next chapter. which i'm totally gonna do now.
fantastic chapter~ i'm glad you decided to finally post it~ i've missed you~ can i give you band-aids and cookies for your boo-boos? D: -offers-
skadfbslkghslfkgh. HOLLY YOU UPDATED, YOU UPDATED~! i totally spazzed when i saw. fo' realz. made me excited~ 8D
and, holy shit, this chapter is so amazing. it opens with these two fantastic paragraphs of awesomeness and lovely imagery. and the variety in your syntax is just really great, as usual. there are so many things at work underneath the surface of your words and i love that. C:
i felt a certain kind of sadness to this chapter - just, like, a tinge mixed in with all of rosco's intriguing musings. i get a sense of maturity and growth from this chapter as well. not only from the characters - who have developed over time in such a great way - but also from you as a writer, i think. your writing is really wonderful to read. so is this whole story in general.
to be honest, i prefer mason the way he is now. i think he's still himself, just with some of the layers stripped off.
as for demen, he still interests me. he might be creepy, but he's definitely piques my curiosity. i feel like something is going to happen to him, but i don't know what exactly. i guess i'll find out when i read the next chapter. which i'm totally gonna do now.
fantastic chapter~ i'm glad you decided to finally post it~ i've missed you~ can i give you band-aids and cookies for your boo-boos? D: -offers-
11/21/2010 c30 1Anique
I logged on to Fictionpress after three years just to tell you this. I have read your story from the very beginning and I LOVE YOU!
And the story too, of course. Rosco is just such a complicated and ... lovable character, I mean, I'm gay and I honestly don;t mind him most of the time. Vito should probably be called a glam hippie.
I didn't know you were going to ill Demen-Semen off! I thought he had a major story arc. And about that phone call scene, it was pretty realistic, I really felt connected to it, you write very actively - I'm almost always following every word, and I can't let go. That was a sad scene though, and a bit morbidly fascinating. Kinda like watching someone eat frogs to survive.
I really liked Narcissa, I'm such a bad reader, i completely forgot what happened to her. Bring her back though, please?
1AniqueI logged on to Fictionpress after three years just to tell you this. I have read your story from the very beginning and I LOVE YOU!
And the story too, of course. Rosco is just such a complicated and ... lovable character, I mean, I'm gay and I honestly don;t mind him most of the time. Vito should probably be called a glam hippie.
I didn't know you were going to ill Demen-Semen off! I thought he had a major story arc. And about that phone call scene, it was pretty realistic, I really felt connected to it, you write very actively - I'm almost always following every word, and I can't let go. That was a sad scene though, and a bit morbidly fascinating. Kinda like watching someone eat frogs to survive.
I really liked Narcissa, I'm such a bad reader, i completely forgot what happened to her. Bring her back though, please?
9/16/2010 c28 1elle is a punk
I really love this fanfic. I think you're doing a wonderful job with this, and I think that it is a very interesting story! Great job!
1elle is a punkI really love this fanfic. I think you're doing a wonderful job with this, and I think that it is a very interesting story! Great job!
5/31/2010 c27 1Handsome Devil
Demen is a strange, weird freak.
Also, it's pretty strange how isolated from black people Rosco is... I never really thought school's were actually segregated. Or that black people stick together and white people stick together. And how come there's only white and black people in the story? I guess they live in a small town or somethin, eh?
I guess it's good in keeping up the realistic aspect though. I mean, all the characters don't have to be politically correct in a story, so his slight racism is understandable. It's just unnerving that this even exists in this time, year, decade, whatever. Cause where I'm from, we don't even see your skin colour or anything. We just talk and co-exist and shit... it's just different seeing this in a story set in the present, that's why I'm blabbing about it.
Anyway, I'll stop being weird now and I'll start demanding you update!
UPDATE!
PS. I'm black, so this is probably why I felt so strange about it. Not that people ever guess I am... but still, that's most likely why I felt I had to write this long-ass thing about it.
1Handsome DevilDemen is a strange, weird freak.
Also, it's pretty strange how isolated from black people Rosco is... I never really thought school's were actually segregated. Or that black people stick together and white people stick together. And how come there's only white and black people in the story? I guess they live in a small town or somethin, eh?
I guess it's good in keeping up the realistic aspect though. I mean, all the characters don't have to be politically correct in a story, so his slight racism is understandable. It's just unnerving that this even exists in this time, year, decade, whatever. Cause where I'm from, we don't even see your skin colour or anything. We just talk and co-exist and shit... it's just different seeing this in a story set in the present, that's why I'm blabbing about it.
Anyway, I'll stop being weird now and I'll start demanding you update!
UPDATE!
PS. I'm black, so this is probably why I felt so strange about it. Not that people ever guess I am... but still, that's most likely why I felt I had to write this long-ass thing about it.
5/31/2010 c28 Handsome Devil
OMGAH WTF STFU!
This is where you stopped? No! How could you do this to me? To us? :(
I'm heartbroken... I really thought this story was complete, but instead, last time you updated was last year. Please don't stop writing this- even if you think the next chapter will seem different and won't fit or something... you could WRITE anything and I would lap it up like a thirsty camel in the desert. Seriously, I would lap that shit up. Lick it good.
Update soon, dude. Else I might die & I don't think the world could handle it if I was dead. :)
OMGAH WTF STFU!
This is where you stopped? No! How could you do this to me? To us? :(
I'm heartbroken... I really thought this story was complete, but instead, last time you updated was last year. Please don't stop writing this- even if you think the next chapter will seem different and won't fit or something... you could WRITE anything and I would lap it up like a thirsty camel in the desert. Seriously, I would lap that shit up. Lick it good.
Update soon, dude. Else I might die & I don't think the world could handle it if I was dead. :)
5/31/2010 c26 Handsome Devil
This is pretty sad. I didn't expect it at all. :(
Poor Mason, he's just a cute little kitten boy. He doesn't deserve this. I really have no idea what I would do if that was happening to my friend. So I won't get angry at Vito and Narcissa for keeping it a secret. I just didn't expect that. He seemed so normal and weird when Everett and Rosco went to visit. I mean, he was a little homophobic, but I took that normally.
And this all makes Everett seem like even more of an ass. Mason was just looking for some lovve. :( :( :(
This is pretty sad. I didn't expect it at all. :(
Poor Mason, he's just a cute little kitten boy. He doesn't deserve this. I really have no idea what I would do if that was happening to my friend. So I won't get angry at Vito and Narcissa for keeping it a secret. I just didn't expect that. He seemed so normal and weird when Everett and Rosco went to visit. I mean, he was a little homophobic, but I took that normally.
And this all makes Everett seem like even more of an ass. Mason was just looking for some lovve. :( :( :(
5/30/2010 c17 Handsome Devil
This story seems to get better and better and interesting and more interesting every time I go to a new chapter. I admit, the beginning was annoying. I seriously wanted to kill Rosco at times. Everett too. It was just... weird. And then when Mason entered the picture, it was ULTIMATE weird. But then Vito came and Rosco changed JUST A BIT, I mean, he can even talk to girls now. So yeah, it seems to be getting better with every chapter.
But I really hope what I want to happen happens. I mean, I really, really hope it does. And soon.
And if it doesn't happen, I just might die. :)
This story seems to get better and better and interesting and more interesting every time I go to a new chapter. I admit, the beginning was annoying. I seriously wanted to kill Rosco at times. Everett too. It was just... weird. And then when Mason entered the picture, it was ULTIMATE weird. But then Vito came and Rosco changed JUST A BIT, I mean, he can even talk to girls now. So yeah, it seems to be getting better with every chapter.
But I really hope what I want to happen happens. I mean, I really, really hope it does. And soon.
And if it doesn't happen, I just might die. :)
2/24/2010 c15 Heather
I had thought Rosco would turn out gay considering that to me it seemed like Vito had taken an interest in him as in he likes him or something..and I had thought they were gonna get together lol, oh well...it's a good story anyways but I read fiction that's mainly mxm...I'll continue reading this though cuz it has me hooked in knowing what's gonna happen
I had thought Rosco would turn out gay considering that to me it seemed like Vito had taken an interest in him as in he likes him or something..and I had thought they were gonna get together lol, oh well...it's a good story anyways but I read fiction that's mainly mxm...I'll continue reading this though cuz it has me hooked in knowing what's gonna happen
2/9/2010 c28 3Amarylla
I spent the last week reading this story and I absolutely love it.
Seriously, your characters are just so realistic. Rosco's thoughts are so amusing and I like seeing everything from his perspective. I like how you didn't make him effeminate, sappy, or whatever.
But my favorite character is Vito. Hands down. I seriously love him. I've actually laughed out loud at some of the things he's said, which is very rare for me to do.
Everett is such an ass. I mean, coming out on that particular day, not taking Mason's abuse seriously...but for some reason, I can't totally hate him. And Mason is adorable, even if really weird with some of the feline behaviors he did earlier (tree biting? Really?). And Demen is just...out there. I don't know what to think of him. Ty is cool. I like him.
Anyway, really great story. Kudos.
3AmaryllaI spent the last week reading this story and I absolutely love it.
Seriously, your characters are just so realistic. Rosco's thoughts are so amusing and I like seeing everything from his perspective. I like how you didn't make him effeminate, sappy, or whatever.
But my favorite character is Vito. Hands down. I seriously love him. I've actually laughed out loud at some of the things he's said, which is very rare for me to do.
Everett is such an ass. I mean, coming out on that particular day, not taking Mason's abuse seriously...but for some reason, I can't totally hate him. And Mason is adorable, even if really weird with some of the feline behaviors he did earlier (tree biting? Really?). And Demen is just...out there. I don't know what to think of him. Ty is cool. I like him.
Anyway, really great story. Kudos.
1/23/2010 c28 1Mr.Street
So i just finished powering through all 28 chapters and i have to say a few things
1. I absolutely FUCKING love it.
2. Rosco is hilarious.
3. I'm crushing on the fictional character Mason (how fucking sad is that?)
anyway can't wait for more! your an excellent writer, and this is one of the few stories on Fiction Press i'm actually interested in keeping up with. Can't wait for more!
1Mr.StreetSo i just finished powering through all 28 chapters and i have to say a few things
1. I absolutely FUCKING love it.
2. Rosco is hilarious.
3. I'm crushing on the fictional character Mason (how fucking sad is that?)
anyway can't wait for more! your an excellent writer, and this is one of the few stories on Fiction Press i'm actually interested in keeping up with. Can't wait for more!
12/22/2009 c14 5alyxnic
oh gawd, i absolutely adore this story.
the summary is perfect, the title is amazing, and the story is gold.
rosco is amazing. he is funny, cynical, brutally honest, poetic, and just plain amusing at times.
this story is awesome. i especially love these lines:
"It’s around six by then and dark outside. I just stare at the road. My eyes hurt when the streetlights hit them."
i don't know why, it's just so...
i don't know.
but rosco is hilarious and so honest and makes me bust out laughing.
you, my friend, are writing gold, the genius of fictionpress.
5alyxnicoh gawd, i absolutely adore this story.
the summary is perfect, the title is amazing, and the story is gold.
rosco is amazing. he is funny, cynical, brutally honest, poetic, and just plain amusing at times.
this story is awesome. i especially love these lines:
"It’s around six by then and dark outside. I just stare at the road. My eyes hurt when the streetlights hit them."
i don't know why, it's just so...
i don't know.
but rosco is hilarious and so honest and makes me bust out laughing.
you, my friend, are writing gold, the genius of fictionpress.
9/12/2009 c28 3forever isnt that long
NO. I never want it to end. I want it to last the rest of my life. :3
And, I quite enjoyed the.. “Ever since my first ejaculation,” Vito begins, spinning in sluggish, nowhere circles as we battle. “I can’t look at noodle fights the same. All I see is semen covering everyone. People, drenched in jissom...cum, sperm...splooge...to all skeet skeet motherfuckah!” ..part. Because, my friend Daniel always randomly starts singing that on the phone.
3forever isnt that longNO. I never want it to end. I want it to last the rest of my life. :3
And, I quite enjoyed the.. “Ever since my first ejaculation,” Vito begins, spinning in sluggish, nowhere circles as we battle. “I can’t look at noodle fights the same. All I see is semen covering everyone. People, drenched in jissom...cum, sperm...splooge...to all skeet skeet motherfuckah!” ..part. Because, my friend Daniel always randomly starts singing that on the phone.