for Love of the Game6/2/2011 c3 obsessedwithyouwriting
update update update pleeeease ! love love love th story ! shame on that bastard !
update update update pleeeease ! love love love th story ! shame on that bastard !
3/14/2008 c3 AsianPearl101
So far your story is very good. You have a couple of spelling errors and yo should lay out a little more detail I just thoiught I would give you some tips, I'm not trying to sound bossy. good job! please update soon.!
So far your story is very good. You have a couple of spelling errors and yo should lay out a little more detail I just thoiught I would give you some tips, I'm not trying to sound bossy. good job! please update soon.!
3/3/2008 c3 
4The Foolish Traveler
Erm... well I think that the fact that her eyes change color (without contacts) is majorly mary sueish, I'm afraid... And when Steve glanced at her and gave a sickening smile then shoved right past the people, at first I thought that was Shawn because you never said that Steve 'took once last glance at lisa, gave a sickening smile... and so on and so forth...
4The Foolish TravelerErm... well I think that the fact that her eyes change color (without contacts) is majorly mary sueish, I'm afraid... And when Steve glanced at her and gave a sickening smile then shoved right past the people, at first I thought that was Shawn because you never said that Steve 'took once last glance at lisa, gave a sickening smile... and so on and so forth...
3/1/2008 c2 The Foolish Traveler
Yay! I'm glad I'm not the only soccer-obsessed person on this site! haha... so far its pretty good. I would have stayed with Shawn, cuz he sounds hott! haha... This is really good, update soon!
Yay! I'm glad I'm not the only soccer-obsessed person on this site! haha... so far its pretty good. I would have stayed with Shawn, cuz he sounds hott! haha... This is really good, update soon!
10/17/2007 c1 23chimerica
Oh...
Sounds interesting!
Me like the sound of Alex and Scott...although I'm guesing there's going to be more guysncoming later...right?
Can't wait to meet them. Also, seeing as how so far, all the guys are pretty nice, there is ALWAYS a jackass in tese kinds of stories...can't wait to see how hot he is.
LoL
Please update soon!
23chimericaOh...
Sounds interesting!
Me like the sound of Alex and Scott...although I'm guesing there's going to be more guysncoming later...right?
Can't wait to meet them. Also, seeing as how so far, all the guys are pretty nice, there is ALWAYS a jackass in tese kinds of stories...can't wait to see how hot he is.
LoL
Please update soon!