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for january 19

12/30/2009 c1 173Little girl Big world
I really like the formatting in this.

Wonderful imagery! Well written :)
5/20/2008 c1 46stained blue
i was born in january (too)

that's probably why i hate it.

you use your images so nicely,

& no i guess flattery /doesn't/ get you anywhere.
10/30/2007 c1 she smolders
October for me feels full of endings and emptiness and it is the month I was born in too. I can relate to the metaphors in this so much right now. Take care.
10/19/2007 c1 disabled account
One of those poems that leave me breathless. I love the improbable metaphors ("greasy linoleum frays," "a bleak shard of marchpane"); your use of imagery manages to strike that delicate balance between lyricism and realistic grit. My only suggestion would be to remove the italics; the poem is quite capable of existing purely in and of itself and doesn't appear to require any external heightening. Adieu, Kat *favs*
10/18/2007 c1 91fairytale failure
I really like the two places where you use the idea of tea - first when you personify the teabag, saying it has a heart, and secondly when you said 'your eyes are tumbling cinnamon, steeped so the irises not-quite remain.'

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