for Eyes Like Ice6/11/2012 c21 Blath Nightshayde
I thought this story was enchanting! The part where she said her last words choked me up a bit. I wish I could write heart shattering scenes like that. I felt the need to inform you of this!
I thought this story was enchanting! The part where she said her last words choked me up a bit. I wish I could write heart shattering scenes like that. I felt the need to inform you of this!
7/10/2011 c23 
2Ray-Anne
Your female characters seem to have distinct similarities, some of your others as well.
I liked the first one I read of yours more, but still this was good. Especially the new species. Didn't care for the multiple epilogues. The first seemed the most genuine.
All the same, interesting as ever with a well written story.
2Ray-AnneYour female characters seem to have distinct similarities, some of your others as well.
I liked the first one I read of yours more, but still this was good. Especially the new species. Didn't care for the multiple epilogues. The first seemed the most genuine.
All the same, interesting as ever with a well written story.
1/6/2010 c23 Dxbaby424
This story is absolutely amazing. Not only did you create your own race, but you managed to make the story seem believable especially with a unrealistic situation such as three lovers. Raven is exactly the opposite of most of the stories now adays.. Strong, confident and utterly able to save herself. Unlike all the clones of twotlight's awful, helpless character. So again, I absolutely adore your story.. and if its proof of anything, the origional epilogue with Kastalia at the grave stone actually brought me to tears. So thank you for an amazing story :]
This story is absolutely amazing. Not only did you create your own race, but you managed to make the story seem believable especially with a unrealistic situation such as three lovers. Raven is exactly the opposite of most of the stories now adays.. Strong, confident and utterly able to save herself. Unlike all the clones of twotlight's awful, helpless character. So again, I absolutely adore your story.. and if its proof of anything, the origional epilogue with Kastalia at the grave stone actually brought me to tears. So thank you for an amazing story :]
7/12/2009 c22 2Meg Wren
for raven not feeling any emotion in the begining, her narrative is quite emotional.
though as humans, it's hard to do anything without emotion, nevertheless write. you could try to write it as more of an observation instead of a narrative. and slowly add in more adjectives and feelings to show how raven is growing emotionally.
also she uses a lot of curse words. not that they're offensive, but they convey emotion as well. they are essensially adjectives.
aslo, i don't really see why riley, dominick, and spike are in love with raven. maybe you could write a sequel or the story again in one or all of there points of view.
2Meg Wrenfor raven not feeling any emotion in the begining, her narrative is quite emotional.
though as humans, it's hard to do anything without emotion, nevertheless write. you could try to write it as more of an observation instead of a narrative. and slowly add in more adjectives and feelings to show how raven is growing emotionally.
also she uses a lot of curse words. not that they're offensive, but they convey emotion as well. they are essensially adjectives.
aslo, i don't really see why riley, dominick, and spike are in love with raven. maybe you could write a sequel or the story again in one or all of there points of view.
6/7/2009 c23 8CatProduttore
That was wonderful! sometimes I wanted to laugh andsome I wanted to cry! I feel so bad for Kastalia!
I liked C the best. :-D
8CatProduttoreThat was wonderful! sometimes I wanted to laugh andsome I wanted to cry! I feel so bad for Kastalia!
I liked C the best. :-D
6/7/2009 c23 Angelfacekrys
brilliant, mate. I don't know which of the three endings I like better. I like the dramatic finalization of the first one with Raven's death, and the three "males" getting along so well, loving "their" child together. But then I also like the dramatic ending of the second one, where they were all so relieved she lived, and yet she has such a negative effect on her daughter, who is becoming like her. And then there is the third one, while the gay thing is sort of random, it is like a coping mechanism for Spike and Dominick, and the boob thing, simply hi-fuckin-larious. And the ending with a somber and somewhat bitter mood, can they handle another Raven. Where I think it was sort of weird that it goes from talking about how they are so attracted to Raven's lack of personality to questioning if they could cope with another killer, also factor in that Dominick (sexiest name in the world, btw, props for that) went through the same training and he came out normal, if not unbelievably cocky and sex-adicted, it may have been a little over dramatic, though i still liked it. so anyways, idk what the hell I'm whining about, lovely story, i look forward to reading more of your stuff, and I'm definately going to favorite this.
ta love!
AngelfaceKrys
brilliant, mate. I don't know which of the three endings I like better. I like the dramatic finalization of the first one with Raven's death, and the three "males" getting along so well, loving "their" child together. But then I also like the dramatic ending of the second one, where they were all so relieved she lived, and yet she has such a negative effect on her daughter, who is becoming like her. And then there is the third one, while the gay thing is sort of random, it is like a coping mechanism for Spike and Dominick, and the boob thing, simply hi-fuckin-larious. And the ending with a somber and somewhat bitter mood, can they handle another Raven. Where I think it was sort of weird that it goes from talking about how they are so attracted to Raven's lack of personality to questioning if they could cope with another killer, also factor in that Dominick (sexiest name in the world, btw, props for that) went through the same training and he came out normal, if not unbelievably cocky and sex-adicted, it may have been a little over dramatic, though i still liked it. so anyways, idk what the hell I'm whining about, lovely story, i look forward to reading more of your stuff, and I'm definately going to favorite this.
ta love!
AngelfaceKrys
6/7/2009 c7 Angelfacekrys
hahaha, "my two bitches and i..." you're a clever writer, with good style. It's rare that I like a story in first person narrative. It's also rare that I feel the need to review before I've reached the end of the story. So well done indeed!
hahaha, "my two bitches and i..." you're a clever writer, with good style. It's rare that I like a story in first person narrative. It's also rare that I feel the need to review before I've reached the end of the story. So well done indeed!
4/29/2009 c23 3The Beauty of Lies
I'm not sure which epilouge i liked. it was sad; really. all of it. and yet beautiful in every way possibe. im quickly becoming a fan of your work. good job.
3The Beauty of LiesI'm not sure which epilouge i liked. it was sad; really. all of it. and yet beautiful in every way possibe. im quickly becoming a fan of your work. good job.
4/13/2009 c23 6Carmel March
Wow, those were all excellent conclusions to the story. I loved them.
Sorry for taking so long to review. I never forgot this story though :)
Continue to write, because you really have something going for you here.
~Carm~
6Carmel MarchWow, those were all excellent conclusions to the story. I loved them.
Sorry for taking so long to review. I never forgot this story though :)
Continue to write, because you really have something going for you here.
~Carm~
3/28/2009 c23 Elodie Wolfe
Oh goodness. I loved all the endings. This one is my second favorite and I loved the first one. The second one just made me, meh. I don't know. Hah. Great job with the characterizations, of course they're original but I mean they all had different aspects that I loved about each of them. Raven times two. Hah. I love Kastalia.
Oh goodness. I loved all the endings. This one is my second favorite and I loved the first one. The second one just made me, meh. I don't know. Hah. Great job with the characterizations, of course they're original but I mean they all had different aspects that I loved about each of them. Raven times two. Hah. I love Kastalia.
3/28/2009 c18 Elodie Wolfe
Apparently, this third person thing was contagious.-Best line ever. At the start of the fic I had in fact thought she'd do the polygamy route. I like it. Works very well for this fic.
Elodie~
Apparently, this third person thing was contagious.-Best line ever. At the start of the fic I had in fact thought she'd do the polygamy route. I like it. Works very well for this fic.
Elodie~
3/28/2009 c17 Elodie Wolfe
So I'm reading all this and cracking up. It's not even like a humongous amount of humour or long drawn out passages about characterization which is awesome actually because I love this story. It makes me smile and cry from laughter. It seems as if you don't do much emotional passage as much as everything else if that makes sense? And I like it a lot because I'm still trying to figure out what my writing niche is if I even have one. Oh shameless plug, would you mind reading my two stories up and leaving a review with some pointers and such? Thanks!
As for the three men and her. Hah. I want Spike and you can give her whoever you want. Well you already did and I haven't even read the end but you know what I mean. Great job!
Love Elodie~
So I'm reading all this and cracking up. It's not even like a humongous amount of humour or long drawn out passages about characterization which is awesome actually because I love this story. It makes me smile and cry from laughter. It seems as if you don't do much emotional passage as much as everything else if that makes sense? And I like it a lot because I'm still trying to figure out what my writing niche is if I even have one. Oh shameless plug, would you mind reading my two stories up and leaving a review with some pointers and such? Thanks!
As for the three men and her. Hah. I want Spike and you can give her whoever you want. Well you already did and I haven't even read the end but you know what I mean. Great job!
Love Elodie~