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59C.H. Bashaw
"the fingers of the palace spires/reach towards the heavens,/not grasping, but letting go." Interesting... the closer one is physically to God, the farther they are spiritually? Or perhaps you intend this to be an attack on greed?
59C.H. Bashaw"the fingers of the palace spires/reach towards the heavens,/not grasping, but letting go." Interesting... the closer one is physically to God, the farther they are spiritually? Or perhaps you intend this to be an attack on greed?
10/25/2007 c1 10Robert T. Allen
I like it because it makes me think. Although blank verse, is always a more difficult kind of poetry since its harder to grasp the reader, I think you have good ideas, and good imagery, but when I hear it, there isn't a lot of things going on in my head, maybe you should put more metaphors and imagery into it.
10Robert T. AllenI like it because it makes me think. Although blank verse, is always a more difficult kind of poetry since its harder to grasp the reader, I think you have good ideas, and good imagery, but when I hear it, there isn't a lot of things going on in my head, maybe you should put more metaphors and imagery into it.