for Skeletal Dance7/18/2009 c1 
1tonight we bloom
Wow that is so beautiful. You have a way with words.
I would love opinions from a writer like yourself on my work! I would really appreciate it.
1tonight we bloomWow that is so beautiful. You have a way with words.
I would love opinions from a writer like yourself on my work! I would really appreciate it.
4/30/2008 c1 15miscellanea
I was going to point out my favorite parts, but all of the parts are my favorite parts. Really good.
15miscellaneaI was going to point out my favorite parts, but all of the parts are my favorite parts. Really good.
10/30/2007 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
The imagery that you use to discribe the physicality of this person is harsh, even ugly at times, but I think that that lends to the overall feeling of true self beneath the exterior of skin-feel of this poem. It's a powerful metaphor for anything in life, and you do well to take it on here. I think that my favorite stanza is the one that begins 'without lips, I'm kissing' really well done with this, reading your work always makes me happy. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietThe imagery that you use to discribe the physicality of this person is harsh, even ugly at times, but I think that that lends to the overall feeling of true self beneath the exterior of skin-feel of this poem. It's a powerful metaphor for anything in life, and you do well to take it on here. I think that my favorite stanza is the one that begins 'without lips, I'm kissing' really well done with this, reading your work always makes me happy. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
10/26/2007 c1 613DiaRose
Absolutely dazzlingly amazingly beautiful, and original. So perfectly individual... I really love this.
Love,
~Dia
613DiaRoseAbsolutely dazzlingly amazingly beautiful, and original. So perfectly individual... I really love this.
Love,
~Dia
10/25/2007 c1 half-sketched.staccatos
konban wa
This poem was so... COOL! There's just no other word to describe it. :D It just had beautiful imagery, etc, etc, etc. I could go on about all the awesome parts of this poem, but I've sort of got things to do. :P Let's see... before I go, I'll just tell you my favorite line. Easier said than done, of course, since I loved most of them.
"Unzipping my skin from my fingertips," I guess is the one I would choose if I had to narrow it down to a grand total of one.
Zaijen
-Shan-
konban wa
This poem was so... COOL! There's just no other word to describe it. :D It just had beautiful imagery, etc, etc, etc. I could go on about all the awesome parts of this poem, but I've sort of got things to do. :P Let's see... before I go, I'll just tell you my favorite line. Easier said than done, of course, since I loved most of them.
"Unzipping my skin from my fingertips," I guess is the one I would choose if I had to narrow it down to a grand total of one.
Zaijen
-Shan-
10/25/2007 c1 25the face in the window
So many awesome lines. You have so much skill.
Rowan.
(Eek. I updated. You should go look. xD)
25the face in the windowSo many awesome lines. You have so much skill.
Rowan.
(Eek. I updated. You should go look. xD)
10/25/2007 c1 197the Stranger in the moonlight
This was absolutely briiliant! Such a unique and ringing thought! I really liked these two lines
"I’m dancing in my skeleton
Tiptoe tapping away from reality"
the best of the whole poem. Keep writing!
~the Stranger in the moonlight
197the Stranger in the moonlightThis was absolutely briiliant! Such a unique and ringing thought! I really liked these two lines
"I’m dancing in my skeleton
Tiptoe tapping away from reality"
the best of the whole poem. Keep writing!
~the Stranger in the moonlight