for Hero11/4/2008 c1 Capriccio
76th review!
i think the way you newly approached the first chap.
"what did the stranger do?"
he was born =)
76th review!
i think the way you newly approached the first chap.
"what did the stranger do?"
he was born =)
11/1/2008 c1 happyfulgrace
your first chapter was a really really really good. it was better than the previous chapters.
please update the other chapter or else i will come and kill you.
haha. jks.
you have a great story line.
always. you know who!
:))
your first chapter was a really really really good. it was better than the previous chapters.
please update the other chapter or else i will come and kill you.
haha. jks.
you have a great story line.
always. you know who!
:))
10/26/2008 c1 
1Vivre La Vie
BAHAHA! you finally updated!
bout time loseer!
kidding :)
im really starting to like this story :)
OMG camp in like 1 day cant wait!
ily retard!
hopefully you know who this is now, if not to bad haha
love the bestest person in the world :D
1Vivre La VieBAHAHA! you finally updated!
bout time loseer!
kidding :)
im really starting to like this story :)
OMG camp in like 1 day cant wait!
ily retard!
hopefully you know who this is now, if not to bad haha
love the bestest person in the world :D
10/26/2008 c1 cyanidecandy
loving the fiery attitude of riley :)
please update this cliffie soon!
great first chap
loving the fiery attitude of riley :)
please update this cliffie soon!
great first chap
10/25/2008 c1 cuttie deb
hey hey hey!
that was really good! better than the other version!
don't you dare leave this one hanging as well or i'll personally come and hunt you down! hahahha jks...
introduce the dude to us! and please don't make him emo or goth
dev
hey hey hey!
that was really good! better than the other version!
don't you dare leave this one hanging as well or i'll personally come and hunt you down! hahahha jks...
introduce the dude to us! and please don't make him emo or goth
dev
9/28/2008 c2 6SalohcinSilverwing
hehe, way to put a slap on the faces of those cliche fairy tales.
I agree: true love is a lot more realistic, but at the same time, more magical than any fairy tale can ever say.
6SalohcinSilverwinghehe, way to put a slap on the faces of those cliche fairy tales.
I agree: true love is a lot more realistic, but at the same time, more magical than any fairy tale can ever say.
9/6/2008 c2 happyfulgrace
it is the best story i have ever read.
it is so fantastically good :))
!
IT IS like a holiday to me when i read it.
please upload quickly.
prefably in a day.
yours truly your #1 fan.
:))
it is the best story i have ever read.
it is so fantastically good :))
!
IT IS like a holiday to me when i read it.
please upload quickly.
prefably in a day.
yours truly your #1 fan.
:))
8/17/2008 c2 xbrunnettex0
hahah i like the main character's personality. she reminds me of me. hope u update soon
hahah i like the main character's personality. she reminds me of me. hope u update soon
8/12/2008 c3 laureane
OMG gloria that was awesome!
Keep writting i cant wait to read more!
dont leave me hanging!
OMG gloria that was awesome!
Keep writting i cant wait to read more!
dont leave me hanging!
5/28/2008 c3 loriaG
woh~. the story was good.
onlii three chapters, cant wait till the next
glad to hab read it =]
woh~. the story was good.
onlii three chapters, cant wait till the next
glad to hab read it =]
2/18/2008 c3 1figmentation
First of all, I love the first paragraph of this chapter because I can empathise with it so much. I liked the beginning although I have to admit, him kissing her was a little out of the blue. I'd almost (almost) prefer it if he spontaneously kissed her after saving her but then it might screw with your story.
Also, while your descriptions give us a clear picture of the characters they are a little stilted and very "telling", perhaps look at giving us the descriptions in action or staggering their release almost?
Aside from that though, I liked your intro and I like where this is headed.
figmentation
1figmentationFirst of all, I love the first paragraph of this chapter because I can empathise with it so much. I liked the beginning although I have to admit, him kissing her was a little out of the blue. I'd almost (almost) prefer it if he spontaneously kissed her after saving her but then it might screw with your story.
Also, while your descriptions give us a clear picture of the characters they are a little stilted and very "telling", perhaps look at giving us the descriptions in action or staggering their release almost?
Aside from that though, I liked your intro and I like where this is headed.
figmentation