for Life in reflection6/4/2008 c1 
16Dolvich
Jadedmari-
not to take anything away from other reviewers, but it's always been my belief that poetry should flow out of you, and however you put it on the page is how it should be in your mind. if this is how it sounds in your head, then this is how it is supposed to be.
very powerful, and very honest. you speak of pain that sounds very real. I like it.
well done.
16DolvichJadedmari-
not to take anything away from other reviewers, but it's always been my belief that poetry should flow out of you, and however you put it on the page is how it should be in your mind. if this is how it sounds in your head, then this is how it is supposed to be.
very powerful, and very honest. you speak of pain that sounds very real. I like it.
well done.
11/10/2007 c1 3Adam Flynn
I like the perspectives/point of view that the poem takes on for the characters. Maybe a bit too much material for one poem, but very well written.
3Adam FlynnI like the perspectives/point of view that the poem takes on for the characters. Maybe a bit too much material for one poem, but very well written.
11/10/2007 c1 The Postscript
Great development of emotion. You present some thought-provoking messages in here. It'd like to see a little more fluidity to make the poem easier to read. You present so much in such short a poem, clarity is a necessity. Work on defining and sharpening your thoughts to achieve this. Diction is another thing you might consider to help with this. Make sure you have a purpose for every single word you choose- make sure that every word is as deliberate as what you had in mind for the intention of this poem. Keep writing, k.
Great development of emotion. You present some thought-provoking messages in here. It'd like to see a little more fluidity to make the poem easier to read. You present so much in such short a poem, clarity is a necessity. Work on defining and sharpening your thoughts to achieve this. Diction is another thing you might consider to help with this. Make sure you have a purpose for every single word you choose- make sure that every word is as deliberate as what you had in mind for the intention of this poem. Keep writing, k.