for Lady of the Night5/4/2013 c46 secret thoughts revealed
must say i havent read much on here in about 4 years and yet in the last week i have reread this entire story up to this chapter and have fallen in love with it all over again. love the character development and plot. dont really want the story to end
must say i havent read much on here in about 4 years and yet in the last week i have reread this entire story up to this chapter and have fallen in love with it all over again. love the character development and plot. dont really want the story to end
3/19/2011 c1 xxSTARIFYxx
HEY!
Have you given up on the story already? D: It's nice, you know. I hope you're not writing just for the reviews. But if you are, then here's one for you.
Well, I think that the story is rather lengthy. If you're going to edit it, then I think you should try shortening the front part and concentrate more on the battle fighting? The prophecy is all about the Lady and her companions, then the struggle, the fight, the war. But it's chapter 48 now, and it hasn't even actually started. Sure, the ankars (did I spell it right?) and her country are all preparing for the war, of which importance is stressed again and again, but it hasn't even started. Doesn't it seem very strange?
Anyway, this is just what I think, so please don't feel too bad or whatever. Hope you start writing again(:
God bless.
HEY!
Have you given up on the story already? D: It's nice, you know. I hope you're not writing just for the reviews. But if you are, then here's one for you.
Well, I think that the story is rather lengthy. If you're going to edit it, then I think you should try shortening the front part and concentrate more on the battle fighting? The prophecy is all about the Lady and her companions, then the struggle, the fight, the war. But it's chapter 48 now, and it hasn't even actually started. Sure, the ankars (did I spell it right?) and her country are all preparing for the war, of which importance is stressed again and again, but it hasn't even started. Doesn't it seem very strange?
Anyway, this is just what I think, so please don't feel too bad or whatever. Hope you start writing again(:
God bless.
12/28/2010 c48 JustAnotherLibroLover
Wow! This story just keeps getting better and better :) please update soon, I cannot wait for more!
Wow! This story just keeps getting better and better :) please update soon, I cannot wait for more!
5/10/2010 c48 schoggi
Dear author,
I've truly enjoyed reading your story so far. It's got a very interesting plot and characters that have been growing on me.
I'm looking forward to reading more.
Dear author,
I've truly enjoyed reading your story so far. It's got a very interesting plot and characters that have been growing on me.
I'm looking forward to reading more.
2/11/2010 c26 Arifa
I was thinking about your grammar, WishIWasAnEagle and sometimes your missing a letter here and there and it's getting really iritating. Can you please fix your spelling?
I was thinking about your grammar, WishIWasAnEagle and sometimes your missing a letter here and there and it's getting really iritating. Can you please fix your spelling?
2/11/2010 c5 Arifa
At first I thought that this story was a bit boring, but there were some few interesting parts so I kept on reading. After Aly saw the dark-skinned man, I suddenly had the urge to keep on reading. Maybe this was the love of her life! But reading the ending of the chapter, I starting to think that the dark-skinned man is an enemy.
At first I thought that this story was a bit boring, but there were some few interesting parts so I kept on reading. After Aly saw the dark-skinned man, I suddenly had the urge to keep on reading. Maybe this was the love of her life! But reading the ending of the chapter, I starting to think that the dark-skinned man is an enemy.
9/17/2009 c46 
1schoeppc
Wonderful story! You really did an amazing job and I can`t wait to read more.
1schoeppcWonderful story! You really did an amazing job and I can`t wait to read more.
9/11/2009 c32 38secret thoughts revealed
ok you explained that blue is a girl but your writng still needs consistency and could be ordered a little better and you mis-spell later a lot you have been using the word latter which doesnt get used much in everyday english
38secret thoughts revealedok you explained that blue is a girl but your writng still needs consistency and could be ordered a little better and you mis-spell later a lot you have been using the word latter which doesnt get used much in everyday english
9/11/2009 c31 secret thoughts revealed
you have a serious issue with consistancy you keep jumping around from male to female and do not seem to be able to make your mind up is blue male or female. besides this a good chapter however in these encounters you could go into more detail and add more emotion as some of the characters emotions are displayed very basically
you have a serious issue with consistancy you keep jumping around from male to female and do not seem to be able to make your mind up is blue male or female. besides this a good chapter however in these encounters you could go into more detail and add more emotion as some of the characters emotions are displayed very basically
9/11/2009 c27 secret thoughts revealed
ok you need to go over this one because ranna was sold chapters back aly is riding star but besides that a good chapter. please work to keep things more consistent thankyou
ok you need to go over this one because ranna was sold chapters back aly is riding star but besides that a good chapter. please work to keep things more consistent thankyou
9/11/2009 c22 secret thoughts revealed
nice chapter the story is coming along well cant wait to read the rest
nice chapter the story is coming along well cant wait to read the rest
8/29/2009 c16 secret thoughts revealed
you asked for an opinion so here it is aly is portrayed well as is wolf however charles and sadin at this point cannot be judged as little characted development has occurred i assume this happens later in the story. again another great chapter and a compeling read
you asked for an opinion so here it is aly is portrayed well as is wolf however charles and sadin at this point cannot be judged as little characted development has occurred i assume this happens later in the story. again another great chapter and a compeling read
8/29/2009 c11 secret thoughts revealed
wow im definitely liking the story so far but you really should go over it and correct the errors, the story is still very good and the errors dont impact the read too much but still if younger people were to read it, it may confuse some of them.
wow im definitely liking the story so far but you really should go over it and correct the errors, the story is still very good and the errors dont impact the read too much but still if younger people were to read it, it may confuse some of them.
6/29/2009 c46 5LadyVampireAricella
hm
curious as to what comes next
update soon plz
wish you the best of luck
5LadyVampireAricellahm
curious as to what comes next
update soon plz
wish you the best of luck