for Spangle1/28/2009 c1 
1Channeler
You are the most creative person I know. And you know that so stop being so bloody modest! I loved your story and it has the feel as the giver. Have you ever read that? You should.
1ChannelerYou are the most creative person I know. And you know that so stop being so bloody modest! I loved your story and it has the feel as the giver. Have you ever read that? You should.
2/4/2008 c1 102Aomera
Spangle. such a simply amazing name! this is far too cool. seriously, your writing is really original but not badly so - greatly so :D
I love the ideas here, the whole winter thing - and you make it your own with adding in death and more seasons. the wise old man is brilliant.
i love the way you can capture so much - a whole basis for a novel in 6 paragraphs!
Ax
102AomeraSpangle. such a simply amazing name! this is far too cool. seriously, your writing is really original but not badly so - greatly so :D
I love the ideas here, the whole winter thing - and you make it your own with adding in death and more seasons. the wise old man is brilliant.
i love the way you can capture so much - a whole basis for a novel in 6 paragraphs!
Ax
12/13/2007 c1 34Kneeling Glory
This theme reminds me a bit of Lois Lowry's "The Giver" - one of my favorite book. I'd love to see this developed more. The conclusion came much too quickly for my liking. You've got a good buildup to Spangle being the one to bring "summer" back to the land - she's a bit odd, and odd things happen around her.
One thing that confused me was how the old man could be buried if he turned into a pile of dust?
The narration for this is neat. It makes it feel like it could turn into a charming kids book - Lemony Snicket style, perhaps.
34Kneeling GloryThis theme reminds me a bit of Lois Lowry's "The Giver" - one of my favorite book. I'd love to see this developed more. The conclusion came much too quickly for my liking. You've got a good buildup to Spangle being the one to bring "summer" back to the land - she's a bit odd, and odd things happen around her.
One thing that confused me was how the old man could be buried if he turned into a pile of dust?
The narration for this is neat. It makes it feel like it could turn into a charming kids book - Lemony Snicket style, perhaps.
12/10/2007 c1 16Imperfecione
Fantastic idea. Whole story is just so... whimsical. The whole tone and all. First paragraph's a bit odd, but how else COULD you say it? perfect, in not at all every way, but at least a few. If I say much more I'll wind up confusing myself.
16ImperfecioneFantastic idea. Whole story is just so... whimsical. The whole tone and all. First paragraph's a bit odd, but how else COULD you say it? perfect, in not at all every way, but at least a few. If I say much more I'll wind up confusing myself.
11/24/2007 c1 1Hanyou Yogonem
Spangle's world is kind of like mine, most of the time it feels like I'm in a trance(not right now), lol. It's weird to just black out and go around in a circle, kick a ball, or sit on a swing drowning in your own thoughts, and when you come to yourself you don't even remember what it was you were thinking about! Lol.
Summer, it is a nice word, I just never thought of it like this before. When I think summer, I think warmth, light emotions(happiness, joy, such...), and smiling faces.
You chose a good word!
I'll read your other stories as well!
1Hanyou YogonemSpangle's world is kind of like mine, most of the time it feels like I'm in a trance(not right now), lol. It's weird to just black out and go around in a circle, kick a ball, or sit on a swing drowning in your own thoughts, and when you come to yourself you don't even remember what it was you were thinking about! Lol.
Summer, it is a nice word, I just never thought of it like this before. When I think summer, I think warmth, light emotions(happiness, joy, such...), and smiling faces.
You chose a good word!
I'll read your other stories as well!
11/21/2007 c1 21Any1there4me
I really like this short story. Sweet and simple! :) This girl Spangle sounds pretty wise herself, actually.
Jenn
21Any1there4meI really like this short story. Sweet and simple! :) This girl Spangle sounds pretty wise herself, actually.
Jenn
11/17/2007 c1 177notated descant
This is a very nice concept you have here, and it's very intriguing to read. However, I'd have liked to see it been developed a little more. It would have been a lot more powerful, I think, if the plot had been developed further, and more details on the background of each character had been given. But with the length given here, it's been well written. Good job!
177notated descantThis is a very nice concept you have here, and it's very intriguing to read. However, I'd have liked to see it been developed a little more. It would have been a lot more powerful, I think, if the plot had been developed further, and more details on the background of each character had been given. But with the length given here, it's been well written. Good job!