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11/21/2007 c1 11Seisaset
i like the idea please continue it!
11/21/2007 c1 maverix
sounds really interesting.

it'd be awesome if you continued with it

p.s. the fray is a bad ass band ;P
11/21/2007 c1 35Frau Welt

Your summery sounded interesting, so I'm here to read and give you a review!

A few errors;

It seemed like he stalked were ever I went.

It should have been 'wherever', not 'were ever'.

A guy, no older then me, with sexy, shaggy blonde hair and a smile that could melt hearts, his ocean blue eyes always had a flicker of mistift in them.

There is no such word as 'mistift'!

When I walk through the city I could feel him watching, staring at me but when I turned around to meet his gaze it seemed like he rippled, vanished into the distance.

Your sentence is rather long, but apart from that, you'd need to be a bit more careful of your tenses...

Good story other than those few errors! Keep it up. Interested to know what else you've got in store!

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