for Boy Of The Moon12/20/2007 c1 
3Toxin89
Well, nicely done man. I especially like the part where you make us think he actually got the moon, I like those kind of twisted. Also I think the second ruler line you placed was off, between the end of the son's part and the father's part, you should re adjust it. Unless you were going for that kind of seperation. I didn't see any errors, unless I glossed over them. Well done! I can't wait to read your others.
3Toxin89Well, nicely done man. I especially like the part where you make us think he actually got the moon, I like those kind of twisted. Also I think the second ruler line you placed was off, between the end of the son's part and the father's part, you should re adjust it. Unless you were going for that kind of seperation. I didn't see any errors, unless I glossed over them. Well done! I can't wait to read your others.
12/13/2007 c1 34Kneeling Glory
It is not easy to switch between character's points of views in a single story - you made the transitions go smoothly. Good job.
I like the content and the humanity of this piece. It's easy for people to forget how ugly discrimination and intolerance can be. We need stories like this to remind us. Keep writing.
34Kneeling GloryIt is not easy to switch between character's points of views in a single story - you made the transitions go smoothly. Good job.
I like the content and the humanity of this piece. It's easy for people to forget how ugly discrimination and intolerance can be. We need stories like this to remind us. Keep writing.
12/2/2007 c1 10DemonBunny205
That was a cool chapter. I really liked the descriptive launguage. Your cool, and your works cool. Continue! I will wait in my pen, like a good Demon Bunny. ^-^
10DemonBunny205That was a cool chapter. I really liked the descriptive launguage. Your cool, and your works cool. Continue! I will wait in my pen, like a good Demon Bunny. ^-^
11/24/2007 c1 1Hanyou Yogonem
Very sad, I hope the boy was happy, where ever he came to after he died. Beautiful, yet sad...
1Hanyou YogonemVery sad, I hope the boy was happy, where ever he came to after he died. Beautiful, yet sad...