for The Other War2/13/2010 c11 a99515
For a story that is not finished or updated for a year. I hope that this is not a one shot as it is a very good story that promices to finish (Space Tail). for you readers It is worthy of your time to read .
For a story that is not finished or updated for a year. I hope that this is not a one shot as it is a very good story that promices to finish (Space Tail). for you readers It is worthy of your time to read .
7/24/2008 c8 David Stanley 3
I thought it was pretty good. That part where the guy breaks into the room where Aidyn and Préyhen were sleeping was exciting. That was an interesting choice throwing Leroy back into the mix: I'll be interested to see how that turns out.
Concerning Mr. Dabahov's accent: I think it's mostly fine, but I remember at least once it seems like you just went in and replaced the letter "w" with "v", seeming very awkward and unrealistic in some places...
I thought it was pretty good. That part where the guy breaks into the room where Aidyn and Préyhen were sleeping was exciting. That was an interesting choice throwing Leroy back into the mix: I'll be interested to see how that turns out.
Concerning Mr. Dabahov's accent: I think it's mostly fine, but I remember at least once it seems like you just went in and replaced the letter "w" with "v", seeming very awkward and unrealistic in some places...
7/23/2008 c7 David
I liked Chapter 7. It had a good amount of action and expanding on the characters, so it went by quickly. Thanks! Time for chapter 8!
I liked Chapter 7. It had a good amount of action and expanding on the characters, so it went by quickly. Thanks! Time for chapter 8!
6/20/2008 c1 
1Teldumor
I enjoyed it, great job. This story seems to be the model of show don't tell writing, expecially through the dialogue. Dialogue seems to be a strong point for you, but your detail is sufficiant if not excellent. Great first chapter, it makes me want to read more.
1TeldumorI enjoyed it, great job. This story seems to be the model of show don't tell writing, expecially through the dialogue. Dialogue seems to be a strong point for you, but your detail is sufficiant if not excellent. Great first chapter, it makes me want to read more.
5/18/2008 c6 David Stanley III
It appears I've caught up. This chapther (6) seemed a bit short, and maybe a little flat. There didn't seem to be much to it, though frankly I can't think of what more there could've been.
It appears I've caught up. This chapther (6) seemed a bit short, and maybe a little flat. There didn't seem to be much to it, though frankly I can't think of what more there could've been.
5/14/2008 c5 David Stanley III
I must say, chapter 5 had a more interesting developement than ever yet. I thought the two characters with tails were alone and special in the story, but adding the sister and nephew with WINGS really threw me off. That's very interesting and exciting.
I must say, chapter 5 had a more interesting developement than ever yet. I thought the two characters with tails were alone and special in the story, but adding the sister and nephew with WINGS really threw me off. That's very interesting and exciting.
5/14/2008 c4 David Stanley III
Yo. Chapter was exciting in a very different way from the previous, but I think you know that, and I think you know that it's a good thing. I'd like to know what a cliffhanger smells like; I must've missed the scent. Heh heh.
Yo. Chapter was exciting in a very different way from the previous, but I think you know that, and I think you know that it's a good thing. I'd like to know what a cliffhanger smells like; I must've missed the scent. Heh heh.
5/14/2008 c3 David Stanley III
It's been much too long since I've read any of this story. (I had myself convinced that my computer rejected the internet USB device...) I forgot how much I liked it. Chapter 3 seemed short, but it was very exciting. I think this story's getting addictive... :D
It's been much too long since I've read any of this story. (I had myself convinced that my computer rejected the internet USB device...) I forgot how much I liked it. Chapter 3 seemed short, but it was very exciting. I think this story's getting addictive... :D
1/4/2008 c5 10Four Minute Warning
Whehee! Adventure and really wild things! Sortof.
Anyway, it's a good chapter as always and so was the one before it. I liked the description of the barbarians, barbarians are fun, ohyes.
10Four Minute WarningWhehee! Adventure and really wild things! Sortof.
Anyway, it's a good chapter as always and so was the one before it. I liked the description of the barbarians, barbarians are fun, ohyes.
12/20/2007 c2 Spongey Yelnats
I finally finished Chapter 2! \/\/h00! I think it's pretty good: appropriately descriptive, tolerably few spelling/grammar mistakes, and it still keeps me interested, even though I just picked it up again for the first time in..5 months (I think). Keep it coming. 4w\/\\ who am I to talk, I'm probably 10 chapter's behind! ^_^ I'll try to catch up. By the way, I'm still only reading this story, not the prequels to it, like you asked, so you get a different perspective for a review. Until next time!
I finally finished Chapter 2! \/\/h00! I think it's pretty good: appropriately descriptive, tolerably few spelling/grammar mistakes, and it still keeps me interested, even though I just picked it up again for the first time in..5 months (I think). Keep it coming. 4w\/\\ who am I to talk, I'm probably 10 chapter's behind! ^_^ I'll try to catch up. By the way, I'm still only reading this story, not the prequels to it, like you asked, so you get a different perspective for a review. Until next time!
11/27/2007 c1 Knot Me
Hey Ridge Man! Where did you get that line?
"...less edible than a pile of mushy dog poo..."
That image leads me to hurl! Ha! You are funny!
I'm going to go rate my mom's cooking!
By the way! My dog drops nugget sized poo! (laughing my head
off!)
Oh, your style of writing is... m...well... I don't know but I'll figure you out! Don't worry, it's a good thing!
Remember don't Knot Me! It hurts!
Hey Ridge Man! Where did you get that line?
"...less edible than a pile of mushy dog poo..."
That image leads me to hurl! Ha! You are funny!
I'm going to go rate my mom's cooking!
By the way! My dog drops nugget sized poo! (laughing my head
off!)
Oh, your style of writing is... m...well... I don't know but I'll figure you out! Don't worry, it's a good thing!
Remember don't Knot Me! It hurts!
11/27/2007 c1 Four Minute Warning
I'd love to have a tail. =x I know I've said this before. xD
-calmly shoots Alaric with a tranquiliser gun and puts him in a box-
I'd love to have a tail. =x I know I've said this before. xD
-calmly shoots Alaric with a tranquiliser gun and puts him in a box-