12/23/2008 c4 hoptart
i'm surprised to see that this story only has 10 reviews so far. the characters are intriguing and the plotline original, i am not able to predict what's coming next which is a nice every now and then as plotlines these days are so overused.

i hope to see another chapter up soon -hint hint-

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3/6/2008 c3 3SilverFeline
I didn't get this line. "No inheritance or position to inherit. Everything would go to the legal daughter smacked his head."

Is Thistle talking about Faylin? If she's a lady, then how come she has no position to inherit? And the second bit doesn't really make any sense.

You also need to work on putting commas in. eg. "She stumbled away from Thistle who waved his arm in an attempt to dislodge the raging artic cross." It should be, "...from Thistle, who waved..." But it's actually a really intriguing story. that half-humans can even be considered as pets.

3/5/2008 c1 SilverFeline
First off, her's should be hers.

Anyway, in the middle of the first chapter, Vivian and faylin are talking, but you keep putting "she" instead of their names. I found it quite confusing. You should also elaborate. If Faylin is the main character (in the chapter) she should have paragraph or even a sentence with her thoughts about Jonathan.

And Kyuu never finished his sentence about being a hybird. I'm guessing human? Because he can speak. And the magic is very unusual. Or it just seems like that to me...

2/26/2008 c2 Snow Wolf Alpha
I'm confused, is Kyu a four legged animal or an antro?

Look forward to reading more.

1/3/2008 c1 claw
omg nice consept and a very good story

i can't w8 to read the reat of it to find out what happens

plz msn me again

oh and btw this is the second best of ur stories

and is it set slightly in the past

well miss u bibi

12/3/2007 c1 17Volvo
Oh! I like this story! :)