12/1/2007 c1 11Noellen
Such a sad song that hits way too close to home.

"that you couldn’t see the tears

That wrote I love you on my face" I love these lines, so much win.

12/1/2007 c1 31buorin
Ah very nice. The repetitive words seem to emphasize the meaning of your poem. May I ask is this a song or a poem?

Anyway, at the start it was a bit rough to read as if the words are thrown together just to rhyme. However, later it became better .