for Decision Time, Peanut6/24/2013 c1 SilverLala
That was so fun to read. Bad boys are always hot!
That was so fun to read. Bad boys are always hot!
4/12/2013 c1 yay
I think it would improve it to have more detail about the conversation with Davy, but this was nice.
I think it would improve it to have more detail about the conversation with Davy, but this was nice.
12/15/2012 c1 
9AKhwab
There was pretty much angst but not so much sexual tension. But still not so bed.
9AKhwabThere was pretty much angst but not so much sexual tension. But still not so bed.
12/9/2012 c1 3fellintothemoon
Hey there :) It's been a while. Decision Time, Peanut has been added to ADoR. Wooooo! Here's your review:
Melissa Thinks: As this is one of my favorite one shots of all time, the review practically writes itself. Decision Time, Peanut is about Evie, her boyfriend Davie, and her boyfriend’s brother Mac. The love triangle between the three swelters to a climax in this one shot to the point where Evie must make her decision: Her boyfriend or his brother. Added to the list of these I can’t get enough of would be the brother stories (best friend’s brother, brother’s best friend, boyfriend’d brother, etc.) and so, it’s obvious that this story holds a special place in my heart. Star123 is a literary genius; her stories are teaming with perfect voice, prose, word flow, and characterization that knocks your socks off. Decision Time, Peanut is certainly no exception to that rule. When it comes to cliches, she owns them in every way possible. I could read this story over and over again and never get tired of it. It’s hard to get any better than this, people. So, come on. Click the link. You know you want to (insert winky face here).
3fellintothemoonHey there :) It's been a while. Decision Time, Peanut has been added to ADoR. Wooooo! Here's your review:
Melissa Thinks: As this is one of my favorite one shots of all time, the review practically writes itself. Decision Time, Peanut is about Evie, her boyfriend Davie, and her boyfriend’s brother Mac. The love triangle between the three swelters to a climax in this one shot to the point where Evie must make her decision: Her boyfriend or his brother. Added to the list of these I can’t get enough of would be the brother stories (best friend’s brother, brother’s best friend, boyfriend’d brother, etc.) and so, it’s obvious that this story holds a special place in my heart. Star123 is a literary genius; her stories are teaming with perfect voice, prose, word flow, and characterization that knocks your socks off. Decision Time, Peanut is certainly no exception to that rule. When it comes to cliches, she owns them in every way possible. I could read this story over and over again and never get tired of it. It’s hard to get any better than this, people. So, come on. Click the link. You know you want to (insert winky face here).
11/30/2012 c1 2Unwritten.prose
Loved the flow of the story! But, I do feel so sorry for poor Davey. For him to have been dumped by the girl he loves for his brother, on his birthday no less... Gosh. :(
2Unwritten.proseLoved the flow of the story! But, I do feel so sorry for poor Davey. For him to have been dumped by the girl he loves for his brother, on his birthday no less... Gosh. :(
11/1/2012 c1 displacedfemale
I really liked this. A little more firey than So Much To Learn.
As I was reading it I could almost see it playing out infront of me like it was a dramatic finale confrontation in a tv series - and being one of the least creative people in the world I'd say that's a pretty impressive achievement. It was just so well written, plenty of detail and description without being bogged down with it.
Great job :)
I really liked this. A little more firey than So Much To Learn.
As I was reading it I could almost see it playing out infront of me like it was a dramatic finale confrontation in a tv series - and being one of the least creative people in the world I'd say that's a pretty impressive achievement. It was just so well written, plenty of detail and description without being bogged down with it.
Great job :)
9/10/2012 c1 3D.Avery
I don't know if I've ever reviewed on this story but I just wanted to let you know how much I love it. I keep coming back to because I enjoy reading it so much. It was so straight to the point and SO well written. The imagery was perfect and every word had rhythm and meaning. I really appreciate when I run across writer's who truly have a gift and are willing to share it. Keep writing, you're certainly not wasting your time.
3D.AveryI don't know if I've ever reviewed on this story but I just wanted to let you know how much I love it. I keep coming back to because I enjoy reading it so much. It was so straight to the point and SO well written. The imagery was perfect and every word had rhythm and meaning. I really appreciate when I run across writer's who truly have a gift and are willing to share it. Keep writing, you're certainly not wasting your time.
8/29/2012 c1 MEG0205
Loved it! Amazing story, but I feel bad for Davey. At least he doesn't know the truth... Yet.
Megan :)
Loved it! Amazing story, but I feel bad for Davey. At least he doesn't know the truth... Yet.
Megan :)
8/22/2012 c1 Jodes101
Your descriptive prose is great, I could smell the rain hitting the earth and see her red dress. Very realistic storyline, not typical of most romances because someone is left heartbroken but thats life. Your writing is very evocative and I really enjoy it.
Your descriptive prose is great, I could smell the rain hitting the earth and see her red dress. Very realistic storyline, not typical of most romances because someone is left heartbroken but thats life. Your writing is very evocative and I really enjoy it.
6/1/2012 c1 LilyPadADV
Whew! That was a whirlwind of emotions!
That was pretty awesome. My heart was pounding when I read that!
One of the few things I didn't like was the end. I think it probably could have been heightened slightly with some actual dialogue, even just a small snippet. I really can't picture Davey (is that actually his name? Because I thought it was a pet name until his brother called him that) getting upset with Evie in detail without something a little more concrete.
But I really loved this. It was set up brilliantly and as soon as she head over to Mac's house, I was like "Oh geez!". You definitely did not disappoint with this story! It was hot, tension filled, and just plain awesome.
Keep doing what you're doing and best wishes!
Lily
Whew! That was a whirlwind of emotions!
That was pretty awesome. My heart was pounding when I read that!
One of the few things I didn't like was the end. I think it probably could have been heightened slightly with some actual dialogue, even just a small snippet. I really can't picture Davey (is that actually his name? Because I thought it was a pet name until his brother called him that) getting upset with Evie in detail without something a little more concrete.
But I really loved this. It was set up brilliantly and as soon as she head over to Mac's house, I was like "Oh geez!". You definitely did not disappoint with this story! It was hot, tension filled, and just plain awesome.
Keep doing what you're doing and best wishes!
Lily
5/29/2012 c1 1LoveStory87
This is to good just to be a one-shot. Please make this your next full-length project.
1LoveStory87This is to good just to be a one-shot. Please make this your next full-length project.
5/14/2012 c1 An
I really liked the complex feelings in this story. Great job!
I really liked the complex feelings in this story. Great job!