for these four walls8/17/2008 c1 
103Jesse the Storyteller
I liked your other poems better. This one made no sense, haha. The first four lines and the second four lines portray graphic images of an emotion, but I don't see how they tie in with the last line - which is brilliantly worded, but seems like it doesn't belong there. I don't know. Great imagery and emotion, even if it is not easy to understand. Sometimes emotions just aren't
-Jesse
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103Jesse the StorytellerI liked your other poems better. This one made no sense, haha. The first four lines and the second four lines portray graphic images of an emotion, but I don't see how they tie in with the last line - which is brilliantly worded, but seems like it doesn't belong there. I don't know. Great imagery and emotion, even if it is not easy to understand. Sometimes emotions just aren't
-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (link in profile)
5/21/2008 c1 47i was a postcard
god it's been so long! you're still deliciously angstful. love the repetition of messiah, certainly effective.
47i was a postcardgod it's been so long! you're still deliciously angstful. love the repetition of messiah, certainly effective.
12/9/2007 c1 67Lost In Context
Amazing. My favorite phrase is, "i am a train/ trembling with coal in my veins", but the repitition of "messiah" is also intriguing as well. The overall idea is very well executed, and so beautifully poetic.
67Lost In ContextAmazing. My favorite phrase is, "i am a train/ trembling with coal in my veins", but the repitition of "messiah" is also intriguing as well. The overall idea is very well executed, and so beautifully poetic.