for Walking in a Winter Wonderland12/25/2010 c1 
2Melisa Massacre
Good story line, great plot. A few minor errors, no biggies, however, if I am not mistaken, it's the left hand that the marriage band goes on is it not?
2Melisa MassacreGood story line, great plot. A few minor errors, no biggies, however, if I am not mistaken, it's the left hand that the marriage band goes on is it not?
1/21/2009 c1 6Sophelia
cute ending :)
i loved the conversations between nicole and nicolas - they were really sweet. just one question: why was nicole's family invited over the first time? are they family friends?
6Sopheliacute ending :)
i loved the conversations between nicole and nicolas - they were really sweet. just one question: why was nicole's family invited over the first time? are they family friends?
4/20/2008 c1 9Lily Llynn
Common mistake that bugs me to no end: Your, You're. I believe you used You're when it was supposed to be your.
Also, near the beginning you used eve when it should have been ever? Minor typo, nothing big.
So other than that, this was pretty well-written, and very sweet. I do think the confessions of love and etc, went by too quickly, especially after all the buildup and such. But this was only a little cliche, which is nice, and very cute. (: I'm glad the wicked monkey added this to our c2. (:
9Lily LlynnCommon mistake that bugs me to no end: Your, You're. I believe you used You're when it was supposed to be your.
Also, near the beginning you used eve when it should have been ever? Minor typo, nothing big.
So other than that, this was pretty well-written, and very sweet. I do think the confessions of love and etc, went by too quickly, especially after all the buildup and such. But this was only a little cliche, which is nice, and very cute. (: I'm glad the wicked monkey added this to our c2. (:
3/4/2008 c1 8Written
aww, that was so adorable. the parts with the parents fighting was really scary, but the fluff made up for it. lovely work!
also, favorite line: "I found myself alone in a house full of people."
awesome.
8Writtenaww, that was so adorable. the parts with the parents fighting was really scary, but the fluff made up for it. lovely work!
also, favorite line: "I found myself alone in a house full of people."
awesome.