for The Pack7/23/2009 c51 
2Kem'Ajiana
I just had to read the ending...lol
that is so sad, it made me cry a little! Great job on your story! :)
and poor audree ):
2Kem'AjianaI just had to read the ending...lol
that is so sad, it made me cry a little! Great job on your story! :)
and poor audree ):
7/23/2009 c5 Kem'Ajiana
I /adore/ the Sight By Clement-Davies!
Great job btw! I have only gotten this far, but it rocks! :P
I /adore/ the Sight By Clement-Davies!
Great job btw! I have only gotten this far, but it rocks! :P
5/18/2008 c30 elephant tears
this chapter was really good. really graphic but really good too. great job writing this. i have to say i think that Self Inflicted by Smile Empty Soul would be the best. i listened to all 3 songs and i think this one is best.
awesome job!
can't wait to read more!
this chapter was really good. really graphic but really good too. great job writing this. i have to say i think that Self Inflicted by Smile Empty Soul would be the best. i listened to all 3 songs and i think this one is best.
awesome job!
can't wait to read more!
5/10/2008 c29 elephant tears
i luved all the emotion in this chapter.
i almost went through the same thing this year but i caught myself rite before it went out of control.
can't wait to read more and i'm so glad that audree finally opened up.
great chapter
don't worry bout the wait, we all hav needs. =D
awesome job!
i luved all the emotion in this chapter.
i almost went through the same thing this year but i caught myself rite before it went out of control.
can't wait to read more and i'm so glad that audree finally opened up.
great chapter
don't worry bout the wait, we all hav needs. =D
awesome job!
4/7/2008 c28 elephant tears
ok so i get wat ur saying about if this should go b/c it doesn't actually go w/ the plot. and to tell u the truth @ the beginning of the chapter i was like...wats with this?
but its still part of ur story.
i don think it really matters if there's the same person 2 times but if thats against the style of the story then its ur story.
wat i think mite be good is if u put this part at the end of teh other chapter. so that chapters 27 & 28 are both just in 27.
idk
but besides that
good writing techniques
i do luv that jen was brought here, i had like totally forgotten about her! lol =]
great job!
ok so i get wat ur saying about if this should go b/c it doesn't actually go w/ the plot. and to tell u the truth @ the beginning of the chapter i was like...wats with this?
but its still part of ur story.
i don think it really matters if there's the same person 2 times but if thats against the style of the story then its ur story.
wat i think mite be good is if u put this part at the end of teh other chapter. so that chapters 27 & 28 are both just in 27.
idk
but besides that
good writing techniques
i do luv that jen was brought here, i had like totally forgotten about her! lol =]
great job!
3/30/2008 c27 elephant tears
ah! marching band! gotta luv it! (even if it is the WORST hours ever!)
great job!
can't wait for the next chapter!
not much left to say unless i wanna keep going AWESOME JOB, b/c that's all i hav to say about this. b/c it WAS awesome.
lol
so ... spectacular job?
haha
ah! marching band! gotta luv it! (even if it is the WORST hours ever!)
great job!
can't wait for the next chapter!
not much left to say unless i wanna keep going AWESOME JOB, b/c that's all i hav to say about this. b/c it WAS awesome.
lol
so ... spectacular job?
haha
3/23/2008 c26 elephant tears
haha married couple arguments! i've been in plenty of those (and seen even funnier ones, guy vs guy is the best.)
=D
great chapter
much longer than the last few
is next chapter finally the audree thing? plz
lol jk.
awesome job!
anxiously awaiting more!
haha married couple arguments! i've been in plenty of those (and seen even funnier ones, guy vs guy is the best.)
=D
great chapter
much longer than the last few
is next chapter finally the audree thing? plz
lol jk.
awesome job!
anxiously awaiting more!
3/18/2008 c25 elephant tears
omg.
i can totally picture this chapter as a great monolouge for like an audition or a play. it's like... perfect.
this whole story could pretty easily be translated into a play with some tweaking.
lol but that's just my playwright side getting to me. =]
now back to the story!
great chapter.
i luv micheal! he was totally... POWERFUL this chapter.
but a different powerful from just: I CAN KIcK UR ASS.
he actually reminded me a bit of my friend ricky in part of it. with the whole relationship thing and how they hate when people talk like that.
now THAT made me laugh b/c its so true!
great job!
can't wait!
omg.
i can totally picture this chapter as a great monolouge for like an audition or a play. it's like... perfect.
this whole story could pretty easily be translated into a play with some tweaking.
lol but that's just my playwright side getting to me. =]
now back to the story!
great chapter.
i luv micheal! he was totally... POWERFUL this chapter.
but a different powerful from just: I CAN KIcK UR ASS.
he actually reminded me a bit of my friend ricky in part of it. with the whole relationship thing and how they hate when people talk like that.
now THAT made me laugh b/c its so true!
great job!
can't wait!
3/10/2008 c24 elephant tears
rite now it seems like ... idk, a beginning of the story. u know wat i mean? its like we're still learning background info about the characters instead of going w/ the plot. no offense at all of course, just felt like saying it. lol
besides that i like all the things they do and stuf and i can't WAIT for the audree thing.
great job
rite now it seems like ... idk, a beginning of the story. u know wat i mean? its like we're still learning background info about the characters instead of going w/ the plot. no offense at all of course, just felt like saying it. lol
besides that i like all the things they do and stuf and i can't WAIT for the audree thing.
great job
2/18/2008 c22 elephant tears
haha, yay! i liked that! i like how you got to see the other 85% of Michael's life! lol. great chapter and i love how cute Michael was when Jen was like "You SO like Jesse" that was SO cute!
can't WAIT for a next chapter! and great job on the update! that was like.. REALLY fast.
AWESOME CHAPTER (like always.)
great job!
haha, yay! i liked that! i like how you got to see the other 85% of Michael's life! lol. great chapter and i love how cute Michael was when Jen was like "You SO like Jesse" that was SO cute!
can't WAIT for a next chapter! and great job on the update! that was like.. REALLY fast.
AWESOME CHAPTER (like always.)
great job!
2/15/2008 c21 elephant tears
AW.
Jesse Micheal = CUTEST COUPLE EVER.
luv this so much.
omg i had a guy friend who i used to do the same like debating thing. we could debate about ANYTHING. and it'd usually be a pretty good debate... lol
can't WAIT to see what happens next.
sorry for not reviewing for so long, i totally just haven't had that much time for fictionpress lately.
UBER
GREAT
JOB
THOUGH.
LUV
IT.
KEEP
IT
UP.
AW.
Jesse Micheal = CUTEST COUPLE EVER.
luv this so much.
omg i had a guy friend who i used to do the same like debating thing. we could debate about ANYTHING. and it'd usually be a pretty good debate... lol
can't WAIT to see what happens next.
sorry for not reviewing for so long, i totally just haven't had that much time for fictionpress lately.
UBER
GREAT
JOB
THOUGH.
LUV
IT.
KEEP
IT
UP.
2/8/2008 c20 1tinybones
I love this story.
I hope they can help Audree.
Depression does indeed suck.
Continue please.
1tinybonesI love this story.
I hope they can help Audree.
Depression does indeed suck.
Continue please.
1/26/2008 c18 elephant tears
YAY AUDREE'S MAKING PROGRESS
AND I tOtaLLY SMELL WAT UR STEPPING IN. lol
i can't wait for some jesse/micheal scenish stuf!
great chapter
can't wait for the next one!
YAY AUDREE'S MAKING PROGRESS
AND I tOtaLLY SMELL WAT UR STEPPING IN. lol
i can't wait for some jesse/micheal scenish stuf!
great chapter
can't wait for the next one!
1/25/2008 c17 elephant tears
haha facebook... gotta luv it.
any way, good chap, i like the planning stuf.
i think that to get her to say she's seeing a shrink jesse should be like "OMG I HATE MY SHRINK"
and then if audree is seeing one she'll be like "ME 2!"
lol
just thinking and i don't know why!
haha.
sry for not reviewing in a while!
great chapter!
can't wait!
haha facebook... gotta luv it.
any way, good chap, i like the planning stuf.
i think that to get her to say she's seeing a shrink jesse should be like "OMG I HATE MY SHRINK"
and then if audree is seeing one she'll be like "ME 2!"
lol
just thinking and i don't know why!
haha.
sry for not reviewing in a while!
great chapter!
can't wait!
1/18/2008 c15 elephant tears
i'm sry i havn't read/reviewed in so long. i've just been pretty busy. (region band tryouts are soon ah!) anyway.
i luv the last few chapters.
i like that we finally got to see inside jesse's mind about the suicidal stuf and i luv how micheal treated her when she was sad and that she likes him and stuf.
i'm glad that audree finally gave in to them because she just had to!
can't wait to see what happens next!
~emma.
i'm sry i havn't read/reviewed in so long. i've just been pretty busy. (region band tryouts are soon ah!) anyway.
i luv the last few chapters.
i like that we finally got to see inside jesse's mind about the suicidal stuf and i luv how micheal treated her when she was sad and that she likes him and stuf.
i'm glad that audree finally gave in to them because she just had to!
can't wait to see what happens next!
~emma.