12/21/2007 c1 4Audy
Flow, metaphors, rhyme-great in this.

I like how you connected the imagery in each stanza and then it became its own different story -you know? You tied it all together quite nicely, I really love this.

I /loved/ the next-to-last stanza. This is really quite a beautiful piece of work, I have nothing to criticize. Damn you =P

~ Audy