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8/11/2008 c1 10C.M.F Wright
Wow. I really liked this piece. It was told beautifully, particularly the beginning. I wasn't expecting it to end that way at all, but it fit in a tragically ironic kind of way...

My one criticism - and it's not a criticism, really - is that I was expecting the name Cassandra to also have some significance - well, she wasn't able to escape the tragedy of Icarus dying, so perhaps that was its significance?

Minor points -

She wanted to touch it, know it, know him…but she couldn’t hand around long enough to wonder about his life story. - "hand" should be "hang"?

“I had a twin brother one,” he began. - "once"

The sun had set, the waves beneath us crashed, ebbed and crashed again. - "them"
12/23/2007 c1 18Sir Scott
That was a different. It was kind of sad for Christmas, but Christmas is pretty sad anyway.

~SirScott

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