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12/28/2007 c1 40Romanze
o m g ...

i am actually stunned. in a good way. like... absolutely amazing! holy crap... i dont... im at a loss for words! and that doesnt happen very often!

im off to read all the other crayon ones now omfg... this is astounding!
12/27/2007 c1 612simpleplan13
interesting.. I love the title and you talk about making the death into a picture... the ending about saving her from hell was unique and unexpected.. great piece
12/27/2007 c1 5Ash of Lynne
This has a WHOLE lot of real-world application, specifically to the war in Iraq- where a lot of Americans are actually MAD at soldiers for defending us (when they should be mad at the commanders, but that's a completely different rant) and don't care that blood is being spilled. This is really really good! [the poem, not the situation :) ]
12/27/2007 c1 46ShieraMay
i think this poem is a little too creepy for my standards. Joining the military takes a lot of courage. I can see the picture of death all too clearly in my head. and mommy is affectionate and it's a shame that the mother in this poem can't accept the choice her kid made here. It's a good poem, but like i said, too creepy for me to like completly.
12/26/2007 c1 69Captain-Dalien
Oh wow. That was really sad. The ending part surprised me a bit, the mother being in hell and all. It's a heartbreaking story, but well told. Kudos. ~CD

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