for Crazy rich students and a normal girl1/5/2008 c6 
3Jeadra V
i think it would be better if you don't change the POV to another person eyery so often.
also, it would be nice if you could break up you sentences in different paragraphs. Like in dialogues, you could place them in a sentence for each person.
note your punctuation in dialogues too.
and I would love longer chapters!
anyway, thanks for reading my stories, and giving me reviews! :D
beaanniie :D
3Jeadra Vi think it would be better if you don't change the POV to another person eyery so often.
also, it would be nice if you could break up you sentences in different paragraphs. Like in dialogues, you could place them in a sentence for each person.
note your punctuation in dialogues too.
and I would love longer chapters!
anyway, thanks for reading my stories, and giving me reviews! :D
beaanniie :D
1/2/2008 c6 amnesty
hey, love the story. keep updating.. I want to read more!
hey, love the story. keep updating.. I want to read more!
12/30/2007 c4 2alorattack
You keep changing from first person to third. Is there a reason?
And I like the labeling of who's talking. It's less confusing.
2alorattackYou keep changing from first person to third. Is there a reason?
And I like the labeling of who's talking. It's less confusing.
12/30/2007 c3 alorattack
Go 'save the world' girl! Love at her.
I really am liking this story. Especially because it's not common in a richboy/poorgirl situation for the rich guy to be enticed immediately.
I'm having trouble reading it only because of the paragraph-ing... _
Go 'save the world' girl! Love at her.
I really am liking this story. Especially because it's not common in a richboy/poorgirl situation for the rich guy to be enticed immediately.
I'm having trouble reading it only because of the paragraph-ing... _
12/30/2007 c1 alorattack
Cute! I like the double POV. And the matching names for everything is a nice touch, as well. I'm eager to read more. [=
... And I like Teresias as a guy name. :3
Cute! I like the double POV. And the matching names for everything is a nice touch, as well. I'm eager to read more. [=
... And I like Teresias as a guy name. :3
12/30/2007 c1 cyanidecandy
wow the names are so hard to pronounce and so unique !
i found it kinda amusing how u called the schools
"butterfly academy" and "beetle academy" haha
wow the names are so hard to pronounce and so unique !
i found it kinda amusing how u called the schools
"butterfly academy" and "beetle academy" haha
12/28/2007 c3 I'm the Evil Twin
She is awesome! I wish i could say stuff like that in front of my school...i love your story as usual, but you have outdone yourself...I like the long chapters too. =D
She is awesome! I wish i could say stuff like that in front of my school...i love your story as usual, but you have outdone yourself...I like the long chapters too. =D
12/28/2007 c3 helplessly in love
aww i love this chapter
good that most of the boy
start to like her personality
and that she not afraid to speak
her mind. cant wait the next=D
aww i love this chapter
good that most of the boy
start to like her personality
and that she not afraid to speak
her mind. cant wait the next=D
12/28/2007 c3 alyss
I really like your story so far. I think its a great start. Keep up the good work and update soon. I can't wait to see some interaction between them.
I really like your story so far. I think its a great start. Keep up the good work and update soon. I can't wait to see some interaction between them.
12/27/2007 c2 I'm the Evil Twin
Yay! an update! lol but seriously I love this story and how it switches between Point of Views. Woot! Woot! Woot! good luck with it!
Yay! an update! lol but seriously I love this story and how it switches between Point of Views. Woot! Woot! Woot! good luck with it!