for Misfortunes in a Spotless Mind12/30/2007 c1 
332smile for the sunshine
i kinda like this. intriguing. well written. good imagery. good work. = )
332smile for the sunshinei kinda like this. intriguing. well written. good imagery. good work. = )
12/30/2007 c1 1Gemma Lovell
Not your best, but really good all the same. Some of the imagery you use is great! There is something that I don't like about the second verse-maybe just becasue it's shorter, I'm not sure. I think it disrupts the flow o fthe poem. The other three verses are very well-written. Nice work!
Love, Gemma
1Gemma LovellNot your best, but really good all the same. Some of the imagery you use is great! There is something that I don't like about the second verse-maybe just becasue it's shorter, I'm not sure. I think it disrupts the flow o fthe poem. The other three verses are very well-written. Nice work!
Love, Gemma