1/18/2008 c1 9GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
*ears perk up* Cookies?
Hey, I saw your story in your post on YW101. Can't help you really with titles (working on my own - with little success) because I'm no good at them and I haven't read enough of your story. But I figured I could review and leave encouragement.
Interesting beginning. The characterization was really amusing - the first time Kasey gets on the phone, I thought it was a girl. hehe
I'm having trouble finding them again, but you seemed to put lots of apostrophes in the plural of nouns where they don't belong.
I understand about the editing. I do the same thing. I won't do anything to it until I've written it all the way through. Otherwise, I won't finish it and will be stuck rewriting the beginning over and over again until I give up.
*thumbs up* This promises to be quite amusing.
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
*ears perk up* Cookies?
Hey, I saw your story in your post on YW101. Can't help you really with titles (working on my own - with little success) because I'm no good at them and I haven't read enough of your story. But I figured I could review and leave encouragement.
Interesting beginning. The characterization was really amusing - the first time Kasey gets on the phone, I thought it was a girl. hehe
I'm having trouble finding them again, but you seemed to put lots of apostrophes in the plural of nouns where they don't belong.
I understand about the editing. I do the same thing. I won't do anything to it until I've written it all the way through. Otherwise, I won't finish it and will be stuck rewriting the beginning over and over again until I give up.
*thumbs up* This promises to be quite amusing.
~GryphonFledglingOfSilverWings
1/15/2008 c1 1Sara Frisch
Aw! Cute story.
I will admit, however, upon reading the first paragraph I really didn't think this story was extraordinary, but once you introduce Kasey, the plot does really pick up. Keep writing!
Aw! Cute story.
I will admit, however, upon reading the first paragraph I really didn't think this story was extraordinary, but once you introduce Kasey, the plot does really pick up. Keep writing!