for In 55 Words6/17/2008 c1 
1Keshuoo
That seriously made me lol. It's so funny and creative. I'm going to favorite this and read the rest soon.
1KeshuooThat seriously made me lol. It's so funny and creative. I'm going to favorite this and read the rest soon.
6/14/2008 c4 612simpleplan13
Hahahaha... love the last line because again it comes out of nowhere and is funny. I also like how you describe the planter's peanut, it's very well done.
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612simpleplan13Hahahaha... love the last line because again it comes out of nowhere and is funny. I also like how you describe the planter's peanut, it's very well done.
PS. If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile)
6/14/2008 c3 simpleplan13
I liked the ending because it like the others, clarifies the whole thing.
I didn't like this one as much though because it seemed contradictory. You said things weren't going as planned, but then you say the diet was going well for months, so isn't that as planned? I also wish I knew what ultimately made her change her mind or that there was more deliberation. I guess that's hard in under 55 words, but I think you could make it a bit better.
I liked the ending because it like the others, clarifies the whole thing.
I didn't like this one as much though because it seemed contradictory. You said things weren't going as planned, but then you say the diet was going well for months, so isn't that as planned? I also wish I knew what ultimately made her change her mind or that there was more deliberation. I guess that's hard in under 55 words, but I think you could make it a bit better.
6/14/2008 c2 simpleplan13
Love the last line because it was funny and unexpected. I also like this piece because again it's relateable we've all laughed randomly at awful times.
Love the last line because it was funny and unexpected. I also like this piece because again it's relateable we've all laughed randomly at awful times.
6/14/2008 c1 simpleplan13
I like how you don't know what he's choosing until the end because it's a bit suspenseful. I also like the piece because the title fits well and it's something most ppl can relate to.
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I like how you don't know what he's choosing until the end because it's a bit suspenseful. I also like the piece because the title fits well and it's something most ppl can relate to.
PS. If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile)
6/11/2008 c11 2Yannick
I do not know how I only just found these now.
I know how hard it is to write these, or at least it should be. You're doing a very good job. Keep going. Keep going.
Lesse... numbers:
11
1
4
3
9 and
7
are my favourites (that's basically all of 'em aren't they?)
(Everyday happenings turned into comic relief)
2YannickI do not know how I only just found these now.
I know how hard it is to write these, or at least it should be. You're doing a very good job. Keep going. Keep going.
Lesse... numbers:
11
1
4
3
9 and
7
are my favourites (that's basically all of 'em aren't they?)
(Everyday happenings turned into comic relief)
6/7/2008 c11 21Just Theo
I have read all the stories, and they are very impressive. I wonder if you wrote them by yourself. Any way, some were very good and others were not; however it all depends on your humourous charcteristics
21Just TheoI have read all the stories, and they are very impressive. I wonder if you wrote them by yourself. Any way, some were very good and others were not; however it all depends on your humourous charcteristics
6/6/2008 c2 2Crayons.Melt.In.This.Heat
Oh my goodness, this actually happened to me when I went to a funeral, I'm not even kidding...
I felt REALLY bad though, because a lot of people were crying and stuff... xD
I wasn't the worst though, because my second cousin was texting right next to me the entire time. =D
2Crayons.Melt.In.This.HeatOh my goodness, this actually happened to me when I went to a funeral, I'm not even kidding...
I felt REALLY bad though, because a lot of people were crying and stuff... xD
I wasn't the worst though, because my second cousin was texting right next to me the entire time. =D
6/6/2008 c2 Tawny Owl
Cynicism was aptly named, and comic timing made me laugh.
I love the way you can set a scene up and then turn it on its head with the last few words. Allergies was a brilliant example of this.
Going to read the rest later.
Cynicism was aptly named, and comic timing made me laugh.
I love the way you can set a scene up and then turn it on its head with the last few words. Allergies was a brilliant example of this.
Going to read the rest later.