for In 55 Words5/22/2008 c10 
21Sercus Kaynine
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This was a very amusing and clever idea! I just love how the first few lines start out slow and purposeful, and then the last few words make it all hilarious. I liked the voting one the best. ;)
I like how they aren't pointless: they actually make fun of problems the world has right now, and that slight hint of a satire makes it all the more comical.
Cool idea. Nice job!
21Sercus KaynineFractured Illusion won a Freebie you!
This was a very amusing and clever idea! I just love how the first few lines start out slow and purposeful, and then the last few words make it all hilarious. I liked the voting one the best. ;)
I like how they aren't pointless: they actually make fun of problems the world has right now, and that slight hint of a satire makes it all the more comical.
Cool idea. Nice job!
5/7/2008 c3 15Zonne
Very nice. I like. This is a tough thing to do, create these little 55 word bits and come up with a clever twist. Good job on this one
15ZonneVery nice. I like. This is a tough thing to do, create these little 55 word bits and come up with a clever twist. Good job on this one
5/7/2008 c2 Zonne
That one is cute. I think the first chapter was better, more biting. This reminded me of a very old "Mary Tyler Moore" episode where the clown that dressed like a banana had died and she went to his funeral. I have vague recollection of that one.
Very cute.
That one is cute. I think the first chapter was better, more biting. This reminded me of a very old "Mary Tyler Moore" episode where the clown that dressed like a banana had died and she went to his funeral. I have vague recollection of that one.
Very cute.
5/7/2008 c1 Zonne
Ha, that's great! I totally didn't expect the voting booth bit.
I can't say there was anything I didn't like. Spelling, punctuation and all that are fine. I wonder if cynicism is the best title though. But no matter. That really threw me! good job!
Ha, that's great! I totally didn't expect the voting booth bit.
I can't say there was anything I didn't like. Spelling, punctuation and all that are fine. I wonder if cynicism is the best title though. But no matter. That really threw me! good job!
4/28/2008 c6 22Starleaf
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haha, very funny :) "Have you met my driveway? It's obnoxiously long."
I've reviewed this before, on other chapters, but I really like this one. Very funny, very cute idea with the 55 words. I honestly don't see anything that needs fixing in this one; you've mastered the art of simplicity while still being effective. :)
good job!
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haha, very funny :) "Have you met my driveway? It's obnoxiously long."
I've reviewed this before, on other chapters, but I really like this one. Very funny, very cute idea with the 55 words. I honestly don't see anything that needs fixing in this one; you've mastered the art of simplicity while still being effective. :)
good job!
4/25/2008 c3 Starleaf
Hahaha. I like this one! "Forget the diet."
Good job with these... I love the idea. xD
Hahaha. I like this one! "Forget the diet."
Good job with these... I love the idea. xD
4/11/2008 c4 ByYourSide
Ah, what could be better than PB&J? ... Maybe I should give my jar of jelly allergy shots. *taps chin*
Ah, what could be better than PB&J? ... Maybe I should give my jar of jelly allergy shots. *taps chin*
4/11/2008 c2 ByYourSide
Who laughs at a funeral? Evil.
Haha, no, it's funny. I like the turn around at the end, where it's reviewed that she's at a funeral.
And in the first chapter...
Isn't that what voting day is usually like?
XDXD
Very interesting.
Who laughs at a funeral? Evil.
Haha, no, it's funny. I like the turn around at the end, where it's reviewed that she's at a funeral.
And in the first chapter...
Isn't that what voting day is usually like?
XDXD
Very interesting.
4/5/2008 c10 3pandorka42
Eeuw! You just made me snort!
It's funny in that "what the hell? That doesn't make a lot of sense. Akward laughter" kind of way. XD
3pandorka42Eeuw! You just made me snort!
It's funny in that "what the hell? That doesn't make a lot of sense. Akward laughter" kind of way. XD
4/3/2008 c10 The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon
lol! That was good! Except that you repeted the first line (I recommend always previewing the documents you upload and checking their word count, but FP sucks at word counts they're always off by one word!). But this is probably my favorite so far! Good work!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon
lol! That was good! Except that you repeted the first line (I recommend always previewing the documents you upload and checking their word count, but FP sucks at word counts they're always off by one word!). But this is probably my favorite so far! Good work!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon