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for The tears of the gods

2/6/2008 c1 3DaChickenAmI
Oh my goodness, the first paragraph actually made me grimace, good job. I like what's going on so far, and my only criticism would be that I would like to see you use more commas, semicolons; that kind of thing. It tends to make the reading easier (or it does for me, at least). Other than that, I love the story; keep writing. Oh, and I love how on your profile you put your love for God out there like that. That's awesome, man.
1/20/2008 c1 xrolipolix
Hur, I like this too much to complain. And even if I did, the points would be minor. Ha-ha! Loved it. Oh, but be careful about being the sole survivour of a burnt-down village. As you may know, this is quite common. Just remember that, if the warriors were so strong, how come the younger and less experienced fighters survived and not the war lords, etc. Anyways, please continue! Loving it. :D

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