for Your Sweet Symphony8/16/2008 c1 
103Jesse the Storyteller
You again are the master of rhythm. Everything flows brilliantly, the words form a song more than they form a poem (was that intentional? one of your emails is 'behind the lyrics'). You also describe things beautifully.
However...
I haven't the FAINTEST idea what this poem is about. It's very beautiful, yes, but doesn't seem to really be saying anything about.. anything. Is there a point and I just missed it somewhere along the way?
-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (see link in my profile :D)
103Jesse the StorytellerYou again are the master of rhythm. Everything flows brilliantly, the words form a song more than they form a poem (was that intentional? one of your emails is 'behind the lyrics'). You also describe things beautifully.
However...
I haven't the FAINTEST idea what this poem is about. It's very beautiful, yes, but doesn't seem to really be saying anything about.. anything. Is there a point and I just missed it somewhere along the way?
-Jesse
Attack of the review marathon! (see link in my profile :D)
7/11/2008 c1 2Slightly Spazztic
Sweet Symphony is amazing.
That's seriously all I can say.
Nothing bad, cheesy, or whatever about it.
It's like...perfect.
Nicely done.
I surely couldn't have dome that.
(:
2Slightly SpazzticSweet Symphony is amazing.
That's seriously all I can say.
Nothing bad, cheesy, or whatever about it.
It's like...perfect.
Nicely done.
I surely couldn't have dome that.
(:
1/21/2008 c1 1Rose452
Wow. Poetry is not something I usually go for, but I love this. It flows very, very well. I love how the first two lines rhyme (rhyming couplets? I think that's the term, it's been a long time since I sat in and English Lit lesson).
I love the repetativeness of the title, it gives me/the reader a sense of familiarity; it makes the transition to each stanza from the previous incredibly smooth.
I love the third line of each stanza, the way there are two words that rhyme-I just adore the whole structure of this poem. It is true poetry, unlike a lot of the writing people put out there that is more or less a lot of nothing, but they get away with it by claiming it is poetry.
Good job, I'll look forward to reading more.
1Rose452Wow. Poetry is not something I usually go for, but I love this. It flows very, very well. I love how the first two lines rhyme (rhyming couplets? I think that's the term, it's been a long time since I sat in and English Lit lesson).
I love the repetativeness of the title, it gives me/the reader a sense of familiarity; it makes the transition to each stanza from the previous incredibly smooth.
I love the third line of each stanza, the way there are two words that rhyme-I just adore the whole structure of this poem. It is true poetry, unlike a lot of the writing people put out there that is more or less a lot of nothing, but they get away with it by claiming it is poetry.
Good job, I'll look forward to reading more.