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11/17/2010 c1 Annalibelle
This is a great short story! I love the twist of humor at the end, and how well the whole thing seems to wrap up. How did you come up with the premise? It sounds so odd in the summary, but works out so well. The pacing is good, and I like how you portrayed the pepper eating in a very epic way. My only critique is that the twist that they were both cheating wasn't as strong,I thought that the build up to that was a bit weak and it was not as believable as the rest of the story. The last twist was really really clever though, almost O.Henry ish.

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