for The whole you4/20/2008 c1 snowdance
this is the kind of poem people always go "aw" at because it's so sweet. It's a good poem, but (for future reference) you could add more stanzas to it with more description.
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this is the kind of poem people always go "aw" at because it's so sweet. It's a good poem, but (for future reference) you could add more stanzas to it with more description.
PS: REVIEW MARATHON TIME! (link in my profile!)
2/23/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
OK I like the idea of going from the things you want to their love that's really great and I like the part about wanting to look at their face when they are no looking a lot... it's great...
I'm not a big fan of the format.. the first two lines of each stanza seem backwards and I know that's on purpose but Im not a big fan.. also I think it you're gonna phrase things like this you need punctuation...
In the second stanza I think you need to put when at the beginning of the third line to connect it the rest of the piece
Also two of the lines are really a bit too long for the flow so I might work on that
But it's still a beautiful and emotional description of love that everyone (well i hope) can relate to... very nice piece
612simpleplan13OK I like the idea of going from the things you want to their love that's really great and I like the part about wanting to look at their face when they are no looking a lot... it's great...
I'm not a big fan of the format.. the first two lines of each stanza seem backwards and I know that's on purpose but Im not a big fan.. also I think it you're gonna phrase things like this you need punctuation...
In the second stanza I think you need to put when at the beginning of the third line to connect it the rest of the piece
Also two of the lines are really a bit too long for the flow so I might work on that
But it's still a beautiful and emotional description of love that everyone (well i hope) can relate to... very nice piece
2/18/2008 c1 lymli
that's a very sweet poem, I like this:
Your face
I want to look at
secretly
when you're not looking back
that's a very sweet poem, I like this:
Your face
I want to look at
secretly
when you're not looking back
1/31/2008 c1 32Dreaming Chica
Wow! That was absoloutly beauitful! I love the way you described everything you liked about the person, it added depth and emotion to the poem!
♥ Dreaming Chica ♥
32Dreaming ChicaWow! That was absoloutly beauitful! I love the way you described everything you liked about the person, it added depth and emotion to the poem!
♥ Dreaming Chica ♥