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for Changing Seasons

6/19/2008 c1 criti-sized
What I like about this poem is the lighthearted feeling that's in it. Though there are a few lines that don't gel together as smoothly as the beginnings ones, it's still nice.

[When Summer changes to Fall, life does cling

When Fall changes to Winter, snow doth the sky bring] These two lines are the ones that stod out a lot more.

But overall, awesome poem.

2/1/2008 c1 17Luny Loona
Consider splitting it up a little, but it's otherwise good!
1/31/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
This is pretty nice. =)

I like the overall concept. It's nice and short, and the line 'Oh what fun the seasons bring' is a cute one.

I like when you say 'snow doth the sky bring', but 'life does cling' doesn't carry the same flow. It seems a bit choppy to have the word 'does' in there. Same with 'seasons do bring'.

Also, did you mean 'that's what changes' seasons bring? Hm. That last line confused me for a moment.

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