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5Icy Vampire Chick
The part about 'I had to go to school today' was a bit repetitive, but I loved the suspense at the end. It seems so fitting and gripping - I just can't wait to read the next chapter ! Post it up here soon !
~Jo
5Icy Vampire ChickThe part about 'I had to go to school today' was a bit repetitive, but I loved the suspense at the end. It seems so fitting and gripping - I just can't wait to read the next chapter ! Post it up here soon !
~Jo
2/2/2008 c1 1MysteryReader
DThis is probably the only story I've gone through without skimming down through it. Neat cliffhanger, but also a few comments. A few pragraphs were too piled up together with that, too much of Tai saying, 'I had to go to school today.' three times I call would have been maximum, but that's really it. I hope you update, and I mean it.
1MysteryReaderDThis is probably the only story I've gone through without skimming down through it. Neat cliffhanger, but also a few comments. A few pragraphs were too piled up together with that, too much of Tai saying, 'I had to go to school today.' three times I call would have been maximum, but that's really it. I hope you update, and I mean it.
2/1/2008 c1 29lupine-eyes
Ah, school, the root of all evil.
A good first chapter, with a personable and interesting narrator. I shall look forward to seeing an update.
29lupine-eyesAh, school, the root of all evil.
A good first chapter, with a personable and interesting narrator. I shall look forward to seeing an update.