for Pretending8/23/2008 c5 
7Slender Smile
You cld have been a lttl more in detail abt their feelings. Its almst lk they suddenly hv feelings 4 ech other.
A lttl in detail abt d characters too.
A few-vry few- mistakes in btwn.
Overall-d story was gud.:)
7Slender SmileYou cld have been a lttl more in detail abt their feelings. Its almst lk they suddenly hv feelings 4 ech other.
A lttl in detail abt d characters too.
A few-vry few- mistakes in btwn.
Overall-d story was gud.:)
6/18/2008 c5 Elodie Wolfe
I liked this one a bunch, I'd love to see a sequel after we finish editing everything else. Now one questions is David her step-brother or what? I got lost in the family thing. Either it doesnt bother me cuz they're step-sibs.
Middi~
I liked this one a bunch, I'd love to see a sequel after we finish editing everything else. Now one questions is David her step-brother or what? I got lost in the family thing. Either it doesnt bother me cuz they're step-sibs.
Middi~
2/9/2008 c5 lexie daniel
MAKE MORE! really good tho :)!
MAKE MORE! really good tho :)!
2/9/2008 c4 lexie daniel
good chapter:)!
good chapter:)!
2/9/2008 c3 lexie daniel
AH! XD! really good ! plz MAKE MORE CHAPTERS!
AH! XD! really good ! plz MAKE MORE CHAPTERS!
2/9/2008 c1 1vanilla skyy
It's a very good set-up for a romantic comedy. Well, not necessarily a comedy, maybe just a romance. Either way, please continue.
Oh, and check out my story if you get a chance - if it doesn't creep you out too much, that is!
1vanilla skyyIt's a very good set-up for a romantic comedy. Well, not necessarily a comedy, maybe just a romance. Either way, please continue.
Oh, and check out my story if you get a chance - if it doesn't creep you out too much, that is!
2/9/2008 c1 lexie daniel
add more chapters plz _
add more chapters plz _