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2/24/2008 c1 Fractured Illusion
Okay, I decided to check this one out, as I am not familiar with Spiritual, and hey, one day gotta be the first, right? Anyhow, your start is a nice hook, at least to me, particularly since i have pondered that subject (about prescence and such).

I like this Father Malachi, he is very diplomatic and polite, kind of like how i want priests to be :P He did go a bit overboard I think (a sign from God, haha). Lyra seems interesting but it seems this is surrounding a so much bigger story, this just feel like a small snippet. While the start was strong, the ending was weak, so I suggest bettering that part.

- Frac, from Review marathon (link in profile)

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