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for One Night I Woke Up

2/18/2008 c1 John Scott Brewer
Very disjointed and lilting in a nicely crazy way

Very burning behind the eyes feeling. Great sense of night terror.

Good to be seeing some new stuff from your corner of the world Aslan. :)
2/18/2008 c1 she smolders
The first line just drew me in, my dreams always feel so lucid and the next day are more like memories that I have actually lived. This piece is just stunning and powerful and I could say a lot more but I don't want to sound cliche.

"for you too have had this dream" - there's something about this line that was touching and felt so personal, like you were talking just to me. Take care.
2/18/2008 c1 16Dragonitelover
I really like the imagery and use of words in this poem! The only thing I can really say is that the last line seems disconnected from the flow of the rest of the poem. That might have been the point, I'm not sure, but I thought I'd mention it. Keep up the good work! : )

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