for One Night I Woke Up2/18/2008 c1 John Scott Brewer
Very disjointed and lilting in a nicely crazy way
Very burning behind the eyes feeling. Great sense of night terror.
Good to be seeing some new stuff from your corner of the world Aslan. :)
Very disjointed and lilting in a nicely crazy way
Very burning behind the eyes feeling. Great sense of night terror.
Good to be seeing some new stuff from your corner of the world Aslan. :)
2/18/2008 c1 she smolders
The first line just drew me in, my dreams always feel so lucid and the next day are more like memories that I have actually lived. This piece is just stunning and powerful and I could say a lot more but I don't want to sound cliche.
"for you too have had this dream" - there's something about this line that was touching and felt so personal, like you were talking just to me. Take care.
The first line just drew me in, my dreams always feel so lucid and the next day are more like memories that I have actually lived. This piece is just stunning and powerful and I could say a lot more but I don't want to sound cliche.
"for you too have had this dream" - there's something about this line that was touching and felt so personal, like you were talking just to me. Take care.
2/18/2008 c1 
16Dragonitelover
I really like the imagery and use of words in this poem! The only thing I can really say is that the last line seems disconnected from the flow of the rest of the poem. That might have been the point, I'm not sure, but I thought I'd mention it. Keep up the good work! : )
16DragoniteloverI really like the imagery and use of words in this poem! The only thing I can really say is that the last line seems disconnected from the flow of the rest of the poem. That might have been the point, I'm not sure, but I thought I'd mention it. Keep up the good work! : )