for Time7/25/2008 c1 
4Myrix
Very powerful! Loved the few-words-could-kill aura! By the way thanks for reveiwing my haiku. Heres your cookie! *hands out cookie*
4MyrixVery powerful! Loved the few-words-could-kill aura! By the way thanks for reveiwing my haiku. Heres your cookie! *hands out cookie*
3/14/2008 c1 22PunK.cHEw.AsIAn
I really like this alot :) the thought of time being death's best friend is really interestingly phrased; I can understand what you mean by that, because time is something we can't stop, and every second that passes by takes us closer to our deaths.
This poem is really nice in it's simplicity, because it made me think about something deep (the grimness of time) with only a few simple words. I can't wait to read more from you.
-PunK.cHEw.AsIAn.
P.S. I know this is really belated, but thank you for the review :)
22PunK.cHEw.AsIAnI really like this alot :) the thought of time being death's best friend is really interestingly phrased; I can understand what you mean by that, because time is something we can't stop, and every second that passes by takes us closer to our deaths.
This poem is really nice in it's simplicity, because it made me think about something deep (the grimness of time) with only a few simple words. I can't wait to read more from you.
-PunK.cHEw.AsIAn.
P.S. I know this is really belated, but thank you for the review :)
2/22/2008 c1 16right2reality
Yeah, I think the exact same thing! I love how you have managed to fit this thought provoking notion into the confines of a haiku without losing the fundamental meaning driving it. Great job! Keep up the good work!
-right2reality
16right2realityYeah, I think the exact same thing! I love how you have managed to fit this thought provoking notion into the confines of a haiku without losing the fundamental meaning driving it. Great job! Keep up the good work!
-right2reality
2/22/2008 c1 ygg
Aah but isn't time also an enormous gift? Although we have nothing compared to the age of the Earth, we've still received enough time for our lifetimes to be wonderfully creative, to grow, to learn, to enjoy, but also to grieve, to be in pain and to makes mistakes. Imo the tension between the positive and negative aspects makes it even more astonishing and awe-inspiring. And death? I believe in Tolle's words when he says "death is not the opposite of life; birth is the opposite of death; life is eternal". Good, thought-provoking poem.
Aah but isn't time also an enormous gift? Although we have nothing compared to the age of the Earth, we've still received enough time for our lifetimes to be wonderfully creative, to grow, to learn, to enjoy, but also to grieve, to be in pain and to makes mistakes. Imo the tension between the positive and negative aspects makes it even more astonishing and awe-inspiring. And death? I believe in Tolle's words when he says "death is not the opposite of life; birth is the opposite of death; life is eternal". Good, thought-provoking poem.
2/21/2008 c1 121doctor's diagnosis
I love how each line is it's own sentance, or idea at least. Myself included unfortunatly, a lot of haiku writers just break up a sentance for preservation of form. All I can really tell you is punctuation.
121doctor's diagnosisI love how each line is it's own sentance, or idea at least. Myself included unfortunatly, a lot of haiku writers just break up a sentance for preservation of form. All I can really tell you is punctuation.
2/21/2008 c1 23WickedSilence
It's true what you say in the summary: it is slightly negative. However, at the same time, depending on your view on control and Death personified, perhaps it isn't negative, but rather neutral and simply introspective? It's very straightforward and the better for it. I like how you link death and time as something that is so fleeting like sand in a sieve. Normally one thinks of life as fleeting and not death. Cheers!
23WickedSilenceIt's true what you say in the summary: it is slightly negative. However, at the same time, depending on your view on control and Death personified, perhaps it isn't negative, but rather neutral and simply introspective? It's very straightforward and the better for it. I like how you link death and time as something that is so fleeting like sand in a sieve. Normally one thinks of life as fleeting and not death. Cheers!
2/21/2008 c1 31writingxonxwalls
I've never really thought about time that way ("deaths best friend"). It's an interesting way to think about it, because no matter how many life expierences you gain through time, it always takes you one step closer to losing your family, friends, and yourself to death. Nice job!
And just a teensy grammar mistake "death's"
Or maybe you meant it the other way?
WELL- it was good, I enjoyed reading!
-WxOxW
31writingxonxwallsI've never really thought about time that way ("deaths best friend"). It's an interesting way to think about it, because no matter how many life expierences you gain through time, it always takes you one step closer to losing your family, friends, and yourself to death. Nice job!
And just a teensy grammar mistake "death's"
Or maybe you meant it the other way?
WELL- it was good, I enjoyed reading!
-WxOxW