for Forgotten Why forgive?2/29/2008 c1 
56felicia13
Well... it's nice. Not really exciting, but it's got a nice little something of Alex. The last part (it's not really a stanza, as such) is the best, really.
"dancing away like herself,
singing to anyone who cares to listen,
and I’m already the past." Great ending.
The line in the middle part (still not really stanzas), "fingers still in anticipation of the attack." is awkward because it doesn't really fit with the rest of the poem. I mean... what attack? I thought she was going to tickle you or something.
Other than that, though, it was nice.
Always,
Felicia.
56felicia13Well... it's nice. Not really exciting, but it's got a nice little something of Alex. The last part (it's not really a stanza, as such) is the best, really.
"dancing away like herself,
singing to anyone who cares to listen,
and I’m already the past." Great ending.
The line in the middle part (still not really stanzas), "fingers still in anticipation of the attack." is awkward because it doesn't really fit with the rest of the poem. I mean... what attack? I thought she was going to tickle you or something.
Other than that, though, it was nice.
Always,
Felicia.
2/28/2008 c1 54kaylajac
at first I wasn't quite captivated by this [though it's a very pleasant sweet poem] but that last line is killer. I love it.
54kaylajacat first I wasn't quite captivated by this [though it's a very pleasant sweet poem] but that last line is killer. I love it.
2/24/2008 c1 Guess
... So, it sounds like Cecily, the way you made the last stanza-thing, what with the "and I'm already in the past," but with all the singing references...
I certainly hope you don't think I'm leaving you behind or anything, sweet love. Because you know I never will. ^^
Aishiteru, genki koiishi.
... So, it sounds like Cecily, the way you made the last stanza-thing, what with the "and I'm already in the past," but with all the singing references...
I certainly hope you don't think I'm leaving you behind or anything, sweet love. Because you know I never will. ^^
Aishiteru, genki koiishi.
2/23/2008 c1 Fractured Illusion
This girl this poem is about seems really cheeky :P I like that you could bring out some character, even if I ended up misinterpreting it.
I liked the flow of this, it was nice and different from what I most read of the poetry section. I admit, though, I did not fully understand this and what it was about, but that didn't take away the fact that I enjoyed it.
Keep it up!
- Frac, from the Review Marathon sponsored by the Review Game (link in profile)
This girl this poem is about seems really cheeky :P I like that you could bring out some character, even if I ended up misinterpreting it.
I liked the flow of this, it was nice and different from what I most read of the poetry section. I admit, though, I did not fully understand this and what it was about, but that didn't take away the fact that I enjoyed it.
Keep it up!
- Frac, from the Review Marathon sponsored by the Review Game (link in profile)