2/25/2008 c1 The Sun and Shadow
This was really good, but there were a couple (fixable) mistakes I noticed, so just bare with me while I point them out.

(...Sweat poured down her face as she staggered to the nearby door almost to safety she thought the door is just right there! Almost to safety she fell once more...)

It should look something like this: (...Sweat poured down her face as she staggered to the nearby door. 'Almost to safety', she thought. 'The door is just right there! Almost to safety'. She fell once more...) Just some punctuational errors, is all.

Another: (...“Well hey there, I see you’re finally up, I think the doctor will be glad. He will be with you in a moment,” the girl nodded her head at the nurses’ words and watched her leave...)

There should be a period after the word moment, inside the quotations, and the following sentence (The girl nodded...) should be an entirely new paragraph.

You did a good job developing Kasandra's character, in the short amount of time you were given. One thing that bothered me, however, is that there was no explanation why she died at the end of the shory, when she seemed on the way to recovery.

With some editing, this story could go from good to great. Keep up the nice work!