for Fad6/7/2008 c1 
34Nightmarish Waltz
Very nice good work man (might want to think bout makeing this into a song) ~nightmare
34Nightmarish WaltzVery nice good work man (might want to think bout makeing this into a song) ~nightmare
3/12/2008 c1 879Moondog Dozier
I like the description of realistic humanity in this. It paints a broad, but relatable portrait, that the reader has no choice but to identify with. Thought provoking topic. Good write. MD:77.
879Moondog DozierI like the description of realistic humanity in this. It paints a broad, but relatable portrait, that the reader has no choice but to identify with. Thought provoking topic. Good write. MD:77.
3/4/2008 c1 4Vampyre of the Varg
I love how the rhyme wasn't forced so the rhythm flowed well. Love the ending line the most.
4Vampyre of the VargI love how the rhyme wasn't forced so the rhythm flowed well. Love the ending line the most.
3/2/2008 c1 Saraneth-Marie Poirier
Wow. This one is deep. I like it. Except you spelled "alcohol" wrong (oops). Anyways, the poem seems to hit the truth, or to me anyways.
It reminds me of health class- peer pressure and all that jazz. "Come one, everyone's doing it!"
A side thought: it kind of reminds me of how a few people still wear clothes from the 80's and have absolutely no idea how out of step with fashion they are.
Wow. This one is deep. I like it. Except you spelled "alcohol" wrong (oops). Anyways, the poem seems to hit the truth, or to me anyways.
It reminds me of health class- peer pressure and all that jazz. "Come one, everyone's doing it!"
A side thought: it kind of reminds me of how a few people still wear clothes from the 80's and have absolutely no idea how out of step with fashion they are.
3/2/2008 c1 8Written
"High on an iPod, down on a dose / Too ready to surrender what they need the most"
that's my favorite line right there. awesome rhythm! I really enjoyed this piece. I think the rhyme in this poem doesn't sound forced at all, which is a great accomplishment.
well done and keep writing :)
8Written"High on an iPod, down on a dose / Too ready to surrender what they need the most"
that's my favorite line right there. awesome rhythm! I really enjoyed this piece. I think the rhyme in this poem doesn't sound forced at all, which is a great accomplishment.
well done and keep writing :)