for For A Second8/25/2008 c1 Isca
Good princess-frog metaphor. The emotion in this poem was very relatble, as it takes awhile for all of us to accept our appearance.
Good princess-frog metaphor. The emotion in this poem was very relatble, as it takes awhile for all of us to accept our appearance.
4/17/2008 c1 
13Shasta Valentine
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i truly feel your emotion, because like most of teens today, this is what i feel.
its such a simple and honest to the point poem, i could hardly offer an critisim.
great job.
-sv
13Shasta Valentine:(
i truly feel your emotion, because like most of teens today, this is what i feel.
its such a simple and honest to the point poem, i could hardly offer an critisim.
great job.
-sv
3/16/2008 c1 63yanz
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I think a lot of people can relate to this (me for one) and that makes it so much more personal. I loved the fairytale imagery at the end, and the repetition of "for a second" in the first stanza. Good job.
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I think a lot of people can relate to this (me for one) and that makes it so much more personal. I loved the fairytale imagery at the end, and the repetition of "for a second" in the first stanza. Good job.
3/15/2008 c1 4Nightmare Of Eden
Awesome poem, very beautifully written. I know I've had that feeling before.
4Nightmare Of EdenAwesome poem, very beautifully written. I know I've had that feeling before.
3/11/2008 c1 82Billie.Joelle
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Wow. This poem is very well done. I think it's something that anyone can relate to, their insecurities. You put it into such beautiful language too. I have nothing bad to say about it. You used punctuation very well, unlike lots of other users on FP. It flows nicely and is all around well-written. Good job. Keep writing!
~BJ
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Wow. This poem is very well done. I think it's something that anyone can relate to, their insecurities. You put it into such beautiful language too. I have nothing bad to say about it. You used punctuation very well, unlike lots of other users on FP. It flows nicely and is all around well-written. Good job. Keep writing!
~BJ
3/10/2008 c1 460Time To Change
This is really striking. I love how there's a sense of story-telling and wonder because "for a second" you're beautiful. I also feel I know the feeling because sometimes I do look in the mirror and think that I'm not so bad.
I think you finished on a strong powerful note. Well done.
460Time To ChangeThis is really striking. I love how there's a sense of story-telling and wonder because "for a second" you're beautiful. I also feel I know the feeling because sometimes I do look in the mirror and think that I'm not so bad.
I think you finished on a strong powerful note. Well done.
3/8/2008 c1 8Written
absolutely beautiful. it really touches me, because I've felt this way before. you know, like dissatisfaction with the way I look, but once in a while, I look in the mirror and it's like 'hey! not bad.'
that's a silly comparison to a beautiful poem, but I just wanted to share that I could relate :)
I like the ending a lot, because it adds a touch of magic to it, and girls like their fairy tales.
well. not to say that guys don't, but you know.
for some reason, I am liking the 'for a second's and 'for a moment' and 'For just a split second'. nice work!
sorry this is so long and rambly...
8Writtenabsolutely beautiful. it really touches me, because I've felt this way before. you know, like dissatisfaction with the way I look, but once in a while, I look in the mirror and it's like 'hey! not bad.'
that's a silly comparison to a beautiful poem, but I just wanted to share that I could relate :)
I like the ending a lot, because it adds a touch of magic to it, and girls like their fairy tales.
well. not to say that guys don't, but you know.
for some reason, I am liking the 'for a second's and 'for a moment' and 'For just a split second'. nice work!
sorry this is so long and rambly...
3/6/2008 c1 89Shadows in the Fire
I really liked this poem. I love the whole idea of seeing yourself as someone beautiful, even if it's only for a fraction of a second. I thought the stanza that starts with 'I look away, knowing it won't last' because it's so raw and pure. I didn't, however, think the stanza after that (starting with "for a moment") worked as well. My suggestion would to be to take it out-with it there, it makes the poem more about YOU. Of course, that's who it's about but it makes it harder for the reader to relate. It is a little awkward, as well.
Great job, Esther Jade.
-Shadow
89Shadows in the FireI really liked this poem. I love the whole idea of seeing yourself as someone beautiful, even if it's only for a fraction of a second. I thought the stanza that starts with 'I look away, knowing it won't last' because it's so raw and pure. I didn't, however, think the stanza after that (starting with "for a moment") worked as well. My suggestion would to be to take it out-with it there, it makes the poem more about YOU. Of course, that's who it's about but it makes it harder for the reader to relate. It is a little awkward, as well.
Great job, Esther Jade.
-Shadow
3/5/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
I like the repetition of just a second in the first stanza... I like this a lot... I think almost every girl can relate to this and the fairy tale thing at the end was really great
612simpleplan13I like the repetition of just a second in the first stanza... I like this a lot... I think almost every girl can relate to this and the fairy tale thing at the end was really great