6/7/2008 c1 6Hed in the Cloudz
I was right- you're a very talented writer, I just read the wrong story! I love this one! The imagery you create is beautiful (singing stars...) and the personification is well done. And I must also mention that you involve the humans just the right amount- they have no names, yet are included as mindless creatures of instinct, which is perfect!

My only advice this time is that you find some synonyms! You use variations of the word "dance" five times in your short story, and no descriptors for the dance. Were they waltzing, moshing, twirling, what?

Thanks for the return review (and the excuse it gave me to read something else of yours!)!

3/7/2008 c1 12Xalga
You apparently have a nice rave where you live. I must say, the addition of humans to the party made the story much livelier. I hope you continue to write.