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3/9/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
Man what a sight... a comma was begging to be placed after man

I love the descriptions of the light in the beginning and the whole Old man winter part.. nicely done

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3/8/2008 c1 28friend 49
I think this is very nice, but the one thing that spoiled the mood for me is that you said 'mam'. Given the context, I really think something like 'oh' or something less... I'm not sure how to describe how 'man' ruins it.

Just consider it. :)

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